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What are the advantages and disadvantages for children of television

#children #television
Nowadays in
the
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 world full of technology we can not imagine our life without any electronic devices. Television is one of the most widespread techniques and it is often used by children.
Although
due to
TV
 young generation is able to receive a lot of information, it can cause some health issues. Generally speaking, television is the most common and cheap mode of media. One of the main positives of watching
tv
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 is its significant use for education, entertainment and daily happenings in the world.
For instance
, parents can turn on different cartoons
to
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 their
child
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in
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 terms of being busy
by
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 work or home stuff.
In addition
, these
source
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broadcasts
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big
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 amount of studying programmes,
what
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 is
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 effect as extra education. Turning on the other side of the argument
tv
 might harm health and cause addiction.
For example
, children might be very immersed in watching their favorite cartoons and for
long
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 time not get away from the screen. In subsequence,
kid
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 might be addicted to it and become irritable. Another drawback is
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the probability
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to get
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of getting
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 an ocular inflammation and following that blindness. In our modern
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 everyone
always
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contact
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 with different gadgets. Kids are affected by it too and spend plenty of time
for
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watching television. Despite the fact that
tv
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 is
valid
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a valid
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 way of getting knowledge, it
then
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can be
reason
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the reason
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of
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 various illnesses or diseases.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • sedentary
  • engaging
  • linguistic skills
  • exposure
  • inappropriate content
  • distort
  • optimizing
  • debate
  • implications
  • viewing habits
  • parental guidance
  • educational programs
  • screen time
  • stereotypes
  • unhealthy behaviors
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