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Many people say that human society has developed into a “throw-away” society, which is filled with plastic bags and rubbish. What are the causes and solutions?

#people #society #“throw-away” #plastic #bags #rubbish
Recently, all over the countries are suffering from too much
garbages
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garbage
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. Some of the
people
 and
government
 are trying to solve
this
problem
.
However
, still there are countries which are not
freely
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free
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 with
this
problems
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problem
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.
Therefore
, in
this
 essay, I will suggest the causes and
soultions
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solutions
 for
this
problem
. First of all,
population
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the population
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 is increasing. There are lots of products that
public
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the public
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 can
use
such
 as plastic bags, tree chopsticks, etc.
In addition
,
Becasue
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because
 of
development
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the development
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 of medical technology,
the
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life expectancy is increasing more and more. It led
increasement
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increment
of
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in
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population
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the population
a population
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 which
followed
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was followed
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too
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by too
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 much
garbage
. Even, the serious
problem
 is that they
are
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lack
of
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apply
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citizenship to protect nature, and they
use
 supplies even if they don'
t
necessariliry
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necessarily
to
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apply
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use
it
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them
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.
For the
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soulution
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solution
of
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to
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this
problem
 is introducing
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an environment
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environment
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environmental
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 education system. If
people
 are aware of how
garbage
 can be harmful to nature,
the
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they
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 would not throw away
garbage
.
For example
, I watched turtles who were suffering from eating plastic bags because they thought it
is
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was
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a food
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food
a portion of food
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 for them. After watching that, I do not
use
 plastic
bag
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bags
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 anymore. Second, the regulation of throwing away
garbage
 isn'
t
 strong. Even if the individuals throw away
garbage
 on the
stree
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street
, they don'
t
 get any penalty.
Therefore
, the
government
 should introduce the system to fine harshly to the public
.
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harshly.
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For instance
, the Singapore
government
 fined the
publich
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public
 strongly if their
people
throw
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threw
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 away
garbage
.
In
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As
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the
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a
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 result, the
street
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streets
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 in Singapore are much
clean
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cleaner
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 if we compare
to
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them to
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another countries
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another country
other countries
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. In conclusion, because the number of
people
 who
use
producs
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products
are
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is
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 increasing,
government
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the government
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 must introduce
the
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apply
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environment
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environmental
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 education to enhance citizenship for the public.
Moreover
, because there are
such
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apply
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no strong regulations for throwing away,
people
 don'
t
 think seriously
about
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apply
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that action is not right. As
,
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apply
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 the
goverment
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government
 must fine harshly the public
about
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for
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 that action.
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Answer the 'Problem and Solution' topic

Problem-and-solution essays fall naturally into two parts, the first describing and exploring the problem, the second setting out the solution or solutions.

You essay structure should look something like this:

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – Problems
  • Body paragraph 2 – Solutions
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • One of the first problems of the...
  • Another problem that needs to be considered...
  • A possible solution to this problem would be...
  • One immediate practical solution is to...

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • throw-away society
  • plastic bags and rubbish
  • consumerism
  • materialistic culture
  • lack of awareness
  • recycling
  • waste management
  • insufficient regulations
  • product packaging
  • waste disposal
  • sustainable
  • eco-friendly
  • lifestyles
  • raising awareness
  • waste reduction
  • stricter regulations
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