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some people think that buildings such as flats and houses should be designed to last a long time. Others believe that it is more important to provide accommodation quickly and cheaply. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowladge or experience.

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There is an opinion of some individuals that state that facilities, houses and constructions and other buildings should be built patiently and
long lasting
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.
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, another group of
people
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 think that speedy construction is
necessery
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necessary
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 the urgent provision. Despite the fact that both statements are reasonable, I wholeheartedly agree with the first option, as the quality and stability
is
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 in the first place. It is
a
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common knowledge that, high-functioning, well-organised rugged establishments serve long-lasting, as far as a lot of money
have
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 been invested and high-skilled specialists
were
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taken part
on
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work
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 process. In
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,
while
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 transpiring
of
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natural disasters
such
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 as earthquakes, floods and
hurricane
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hurricanes
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,
by
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these properties above, buildings will remain the same and
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the lifes
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lifes
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lives
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 of thousands of
people
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 will be safe.
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, earthquake that happened in 2020 in Turkey, many flats, houses and complexes were crushed
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low quality
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of
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materials
such
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 as bricks,
concretes
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concrete
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 and others. As regards prompt construction of
accomodation
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accommodation
, it is
benificial
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beneficial
 for
people
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 that does not
owe
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own
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 any flat or place to
livie
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live
.
In nowadays
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, there is a sudden increase in
homelessnes
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homelessness
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, in order to be apart from adverse consequences for homeless
people
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such
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 as death, starvation and coldness, many authorities decide to rapidly build care facilities or apartments, notwithstanding on
small
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a small
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 budget.
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, after the unfortunate explosion of
apartment
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apartments
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 in Chechnya, many citizens lost their
home
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homes
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.
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,
government
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the government
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 in 3 months intensively built several houses for locals.
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, in to cope with natural disasters and other unfortunate situations, constructions have to be well designed and long
lasted
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, because the
people
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's living standards and outcomes are essential.
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, every building in civilised countries,
have
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 to be well constructed. Despite the fact that negative circumstances and other disasters inevitably, rugged buildings have to be ready for any battles.
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