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The bar chart shows the percentage of the total world population in 4 countries in 1950 and 2002, and projections for 2050. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart shows the percentage of the total world population in 4 countries in 1950 and 2002, and projections for 2050. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart represents the total world
population
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 in 4
countries
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 in 1950 and 2002, and some projections for 2050.
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 the bar diagram represents
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a comparision
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comparision
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comparison
 between 4
countries
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. The chart illustrates
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percentage
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the percentage
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 of the total world
population
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also
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and also
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 represents
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growth
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the growth
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rate
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 of various
countries
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.
India
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's
growth
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rate
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 was
constatntly
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constantly
 increasing compared to
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china
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China
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.In 2050
the
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China
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's
population
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 will be less than the amount of
population
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 in
India
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on
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in
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 2002.
India
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 eventually increases the
growth
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rate
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 of
population
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 and it overtakes the
growth
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rate
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 of
the
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apply
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China
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. The
percentage
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 of
India
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's
population
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 in 2050 will be more than the
china
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's
percentage
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.
China
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's
percentage
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on
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in
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 1950 will remain highest
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until
India
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 overtakes it. When we compare the
percentage
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 of the
population
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 of
USA
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the USA
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 and
Japan
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,
Japan
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 remains less and
USA
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the USA
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 has the highest .The
percentage
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 of
USA
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the USA
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 in 1950
is
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was
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 more than the
population
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 in
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japan
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Japan
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 in 1950.
Japan
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 has
lowest
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the lowest
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percentage
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rate
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 of all. The
comparision
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comparison
 between
4
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the 4
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countries
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werte
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were
 illustrated in the bar chart . I concluded and
summariesd
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summarised
summarized
 the features and
comoparision
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comparison
comparisons
 between
countries
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 that are
relevent
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relevant
.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Linking words: Add more linking words.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 75%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words population, countries, percentage, growth, rate, india, china, japan with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "illustrates" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "represents" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 7 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remain" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Bar chart
  • World population
  • Percentage
  • Projection
  • Demographics
  • Trend
  • Significant change
  • Ranking
  • Shifts
  • Decline
  • Growth
  • Comparative
  • Population distribution
  • Notable
  • Increase
  • Decrease
  • Population dynamics
  • Data interpretation
  • Summarize
  • Trends over time
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