The bar chart shows the percentage of the total world population in 4 countries in 1950 and 2002, and projections for 2050. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart shows the percentage of the total world population in 4 countries in 1950 and 2002, and projections for 2050.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar chart represents the total world
population
in 4
countries
in 1950 and 2002, and some projections for 2050.
Also
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the bar diagram represents
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a comparision
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comparision
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comparison
between 4
countries
. The chart illustrates
percentage
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the percentage
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of the total world
population
also
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and also
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represents
growth
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the growth
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rate
of various
countries
.
India
's
growth
rate
was
constatntly
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constantly
increasing compared to
china
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China
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.In 2050
the
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China
's
population
will be less than the amount of
population
in
India
on
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2002.
India
eventually increases the
growth
rate
of
population
and it overtakes the
growth
rate
of
the
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apply
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China
. The
percentage
of
India
's
population
in 2050 will be more than the
china
's
percentage
.
China
's
percentage
on
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1950 will remain highest
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until
India
overtakes it. When we compare the
percentage
of the
population
of
USA
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the USA
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and
Japan
,
Japan
remains less and
USA
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the USA
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has the highest .The
percentage
of
USA
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the USA
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in 1950
is
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was
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more than the
population
in
japan
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Japan
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in 1950.
Japan
has
lowest
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the lowest
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percentage
rate
of all. The
comparision
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comparison
between
4
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the 4
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countries
werte
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were
illustrated in the bar chart . I concluded and
summariesd
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summarised
summarized
the features and
comoparision
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comparison
comparisons
between
countries
that are
relevent
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relevant
.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 75%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words population, countries, percentage, growth, rate, india, china, japan with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "illustrates" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "represents" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 7 times.
Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "remain" was used 2 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Bar chart
  • World population
  • Percentage
  • Projection
  • Demographics
  • Trend
  • Significant change
  • Ranking
  • Shifts
  • Decline
  • Growth
  • Comparative
  • Population distribution
  • Notable
  • Increase
  • Decrease
  • Population dynamics
  • Data interpretation
  • Summarize
  • Trends over time
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