During the last few decades, exporting has been progressed; so that, huge number of goods are the same all around the globe. Personally, I suppose that it could have benefits and drawbacks.
First and foremost, products are designed
according to
the needs and the culture
of the owner; so that, a useful object is able to be harmful in the other countries which their people do not have enough knowledge about that. For instance
, guns which are designed for hunting could be used in a standard way and in Correct article usage
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, it is possible that, in another country
there is no safe places and no legal restriction; so that, folks would tend to use those guns in a dangerous way.
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Secondly
, exporting various goods is a kind of globalization which it
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culture
and traditions by
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On the other hand
, if your country has a popular souvenir by exporting
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To sum up
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