The map bellow show the chances that occurred to a town named Willington in 1780,1860 and 2000.

The map bellow show the chances that occurred to a town named Willington in 1780,1860 and 2000.
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that happened to a town in Willington over three different years 1780,1860 and 2000. From an
overall
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view, as years passed from 1780 to 2000, farms and woods vanished, and new amenities like shops, schools, and roads were developed. Back
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1780, the town started simply with four farms on the eastern side of the
river
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in Willington.
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, there are about 100 households in the northeast and the rest of Willington is mainly forested. In 1860, some changes occurred, the
number
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of houses doubled from 100 to 200 compared to before. There is a bridge made to cross the
river
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.
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, the
number
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of farms and woods
were
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halved.
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, a new road was built from the
river
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to the house. In 2000, the forest was completely wiped out and replaced by a
number
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of schools and sports
field
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fields
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. The figure for homes rose to 500 and
have
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a road built from the houses to the schools.
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, there are a
number
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of shops built on the edge of the riverbank and a wetland for birds was constructed
at the end
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of
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river
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the river
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Vocabulary: Replace the words river, number with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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