The map bellow show the chances that occurred to a town named Willington in 1780,1860 and 2000.

The map bellow show the chances that occurred to a town named Willington in 1780,1860 and 2000.
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that happened to a town in Willington over three different years 1780,1860 and 2000. From an
overall
view, as years passed from 1780 to 2000, farms and woods vanished, and new amenities like shops, schools, and roads were developed. Back
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1780, the town started simply with four farms on the eastern side of the
river
in Willington.
Also
, there are about 100 households in the northeast and the rest of Willington is mainly forested. In 1860, some changes occurred, the
number
of houses doubled from 100 to 200 compared to before. There is a bridge made to cross the
river
.
By contrast
, the
number
of farms and woods
were
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halved.
In addition
, a new road was built from the
river
to the house. In 2000, the forest was completely wiped out and replaced by a
number
of schools and sports
field
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. The figure for homes rose to 500 and
have
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a road built from the houses to the schools.
Furthermore
, there are a
number
of shops built on the edge of the riverbank and a wetland for birds was constructed
at the end
of
river
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the river
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.
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