Many governments think that economic progress is their most important goal. Some people, however, think that other types of progress are equally important for a country.
 Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Governments
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around the world consider
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economic growth
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to be a basic need, that they should be focused on
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moving forward. With
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intense efforts
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being made to achieve the goal, some
people
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on the other hand
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believe that
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not only the economic growth but the other side of the
developments
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are
also
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equally important
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up of new schools and health infrastructure
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etc
. When
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an argument arises I feel, it’s important for the
people
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to understand why the
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governments
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is putting immense pressure on
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economic
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developments
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development
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. When we are considering what
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are up to, it’s important for everyone to know the importance of economic upbringing. With the stable financial state of the government, it’s obvious that they can bring different
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of
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in the country with the basic infrastructure that are really in need will be built.
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, when
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initiatives are taken by the state, it adds to the country’s security, it is like how wealthy your country is, as its security will be because they will be able to spend
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amount
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the country’s
defense
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budget. So country needs to look
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for
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ways to become rich before looking for other
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. When we say
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there are
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of
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who utterly believes that investments should be made in the development of proper schools and health than preparing
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a good
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economic road map.
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group of
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believes that the foundation of economic growth is the other factor including proper schools and health systems. I would argue that, if more of its investment is made prior to those activities
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the economic pathway could vanish.
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, getting
loan
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a loan
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from
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financial institution
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Bank and
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if you invest in
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activities rather than doing a greater business investment like Hydroelectricity,
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would most probably result in
economic
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an economic
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crunch
loosing
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country’s
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the country’s
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security on the other side. In a nutshell, I would suggest
governments
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are smarter than some of the common
people
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are thinking in
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society.
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with
government’s
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the government’s
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proper investment and strategic economic plan, the other sectors will develop equally.
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  • cultural heritage
  • technological innovation
  • wealth disparity
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  • healthcare system
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