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The graph shows average CO2 emissions per person in the UK, Sweden, Italy and Portugal.

The graph shows average CO2 emissions per person in the UK, Sweden, Italy and Portugal.
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The chart below depicts the information about the average
amount
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 of carbon dioxide emitted by citizens of four different countries, namely British, Sweden, Italy and Portugal during the
40 years
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40-year
 period commencing from 1967.
According to
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 the given data, we can see that both Italy and Portugal witnessed
the
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 upward trend in carbon dioxide emissions to the environment
whereas
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 the other two regions had
downward
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a downward
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 trend in their
amount
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 of
releasing
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toxic gas. In terms of
two
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the two
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 countries which had
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 rising
amount
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products that produced CO2, the figure grew from only under 2
tonnes
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 and more than 4
tonnes
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 in 1967 to
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significant numbers of over 4 and nearly 7
tonnes
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 in 2007 respectively for Italy and Portugal.
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, the
amount
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 of CO2 released by Sweden people rose to more than 10
tonnes
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 in the first
10 years
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10-year
 period before it declined steeply until it reached the lowest point of just under 6
tonnes
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 in 2007 but surprisingly intersected with the highest
amount
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 in Portugal. Meanwhile, it is clear from the graph that the United Kingdom observed
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 slight decrease over the years from more than 10
tonnes
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 to only more than 8
tonnes
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at the end
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 of the period.
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