The pie chart shows the percentage of persons arrested in the five years ending 1994 and the bar chart shows the most recent reasons for arrest
The pie chart presents the proportion of
male
and Fix the agreement mistake
males
female
who were in jail from 1989 to 1994 and the bar graph depicts the main reasons that different genders were arrested recently. Fix the agreement mistake
females
Overall
, it is
can clearly be seen that men were arrested more than Unnecessary verb
apply
women
and it was because
the highest rates of public drinking at the given period.
Looking at more details, the number of males Add the preposition
because of
were
much greater than for females. 32% were arrested compared to only 9% for Change the verb form
was
women
. Turning to the reason for most
recent Correct article usage
the most
arrest
, men tend to get arrested because of Fix the agreement mistake
arrests
drink
driving Replace the word
drunk
than
Correct quantifier usage
more than
women
, at 26% and 14% respectively. Breach of order, theft, and other reason
were Fix the agreement mistake
reasons
also
slightly higher for men, the
percentage Change preposition
with the
range
from 16% to 19%.
Replace the word
ranging
On the other hand
, the number of public drinking were
noticeably higher in Correct subject-verb agreement
was
women
, over 35%. After that, more than 15% Change preposition
of female
female
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females
did
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apply
assault
Replace the word
assaulted
to
people. Change preposition
apply
Lastly
, less than 10% the
reasons Change preposition
of the
was
uncertainty Change the verb form
were
why
they Change preposition
as to why
did
a crime.Verb problem
committed
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Vocabulary: Replace the words women with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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