IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 3.5

SCHOOL TEACHERS USED TO BE THE SOURCE OF INFORMATION. HOWEVER, SOME PEOPLE ARUE THAT TEACHERS ARE NOT AS IMPORTANT AS BEFORE AS THE INCREASING VARIETY OF INFORMATION RESOURCES. DO YOU AGREE OR DISAGREE

#school #teachers #source #information #people #arue #variety #resources
✨ Do you want to improve your IELTS writing?
In the education field, the source of
information
Use synonyms
 is very important. School
teachers
Use synonyms
 used to be the source of
information
Use synonyms
,
however
Linking Words
,
teachers
Use synonyms
 are not as important as before
as
Change preposition
due to
show examples
 the increasing variety of
information
Use synonyms
 resources. 
In many
Change preposition
Many
show examples
 years ago,
the
Correct article usage
apply
show examples
knowledge
were
Change the verb form
was
show examples
ussually
Correct your spelling
usually
 recorded in hard
coppies
Correct your spelling
copies
.
Consequently
Linking Words
,
Use synonyms
learner
Fix the agreement mistake
learners
show examples
had
Wrong verb form
have
show examples
 been read a numerous of
information
Use synonyms
 when studying in a field, even in a topic if they studied by themself only.
Therefore
Linking Words
, an
enthusiasm
Replace the word
enthusiastic
show examples
 teacher had an important position in that period because students can learn quickly based on
teacher's
Correct article usage
the teacher's
show examples
supports
Fix the agreement mistake
support
show examples
.
On the other hand
Linking Words
,nowadays, parallel to the development of online databases, many sources have appeared with vast knowledge.
Accordingly
Linking Words
, students can approach the lecture from diverse sources.
For instance
Linking Words
, in
this
Linking Words
 era,
Use synonyms
learner
Fix the agreement mistake
learners
show examples
 can search a lecture from different websites or
softwares
Correct your spelling
software
 and so on.
Futhermore
Correct your spelling
Furthermore
, there are a lot of tools which
faciliates
Correct your spelling
facilitates
facilitate
 the learning progress
such
Linking Words
 as searching, recording and saving the theories.
Therefore
Linking Words
, the
Use synonyms
learner
Fix the agreement mistake
learners
show examples
 can learn by themself easily and
teachers
Use synonyms
 are not as important as before. In conclusion, the increasing variety of
information
Use synonyms
 resources is the reason for the changed position of school
teachers
Use synonyms
 over
the
Correct article usage
apply
show examples
time.
Use synonyms
Learner
Fix the agreement mistake
Learners
show examples
 should absorb the positive benefits from
this
Linking Words
 change,
however
Linking Words
, school
teachers
Use synonyms
 are
stilled
Replace the word
still
show examples
 worth sources .
Submitted by huong.bx on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

task achievement
Provide more comprehensive and specific examples to support your ideas.
coherence cohesion
Ensure a clear and logical structure throughout your essay.
lexical resource
Expand your vocabulary and use a wider range of words and phrases.
grammatical range
Work on improving your sentence structures and grammar usage.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

Topic Vocabulary:
  • Information technology
  • Access
  • Independent learning
  • Structured learning
  • Guidance
  • Expertise
  • Moral values
  • Critical thinking
  • Facilitator
  • Complex information landscapes
  • Emotional support
  • Motivation
  • Discern
  • Mentorship
  • Synthesizing
What to do next:
Look at other essays: