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SCHOOL TEACHERS USED TO BE THE SOURCE OF INFORMATION. HOWEVER, SOME PEOPLE ARUE THAT TEACHERS ARE NOT AS IMPORTANT AS BEFORE AS THE INCREASING VARIETY OF INFORMATION RESOURCES. DO YOU AGREE OR DISAGREE

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In the education field, the source of
information
 is very important. School
teachers
 used to be the source of
information
,
however
,
teachers
 are not as important as before
as
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 the increasing variety of
information
 resources. 
In many
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 years ago,
the
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knowledge
were
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ussually
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usually
 recorded in hard
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copies
.
Consequently
,
learner
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had
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 been read a numerous of
information
 when studying in a field, even in a topic if they studied by themself only.
Therefore
, an
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 teacher had an important position in that period because students can learn quickly based on
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supports
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.
On the other hand
,nowadays, parallel to the development of online databases, many sources have appeared with vast knowledge.
Accordingly
, students can approach the lecture from diverse sources.
For instance
, in
this
 era,
learner
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learners
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 can search a lecture from different websites or
softwares
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software
 and so on.
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Furthermore
, there are a lot of tools which
faciliates
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facilitates
facilitate
 the learning progress
such
 as searching, recording and saving the theories.
Therefore
, the
learner
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learners
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 can learn by themself easily and
teachers
 are not as important as before. In conclusion, the increasing variety of
information
 resources is the reason for the changed position of school
teachers
 over
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time.
Learner
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 should absorb the positive benefits from
this
 change,
however
, school
teachers
 are
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 worth sources .
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Information technology
  • Access
  • Independent learning
  • Structured learning
  • Guidance
  • Expertise
  • Moral values
  • Critical thinking
  • Facilitator
  • Complex information landscapes
  • Emotional support
  • Motivation
  • Discern
  • Mentorship
  • Synthesizing
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