Write about the following topic: Some people believe that schools should reward those students who show excellent academic performance while some believe that only the ones who show significant improvement in the grades should be rewarded. Discuss both the views and give your opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Nowadays, some
students
achieve good
grades
after doing their hard work in the examination. Certain people think that institutes should
reward
those
students
who show brilliant academic performance. At the same time, some believe that only the ones who show significant improvement in their
grades
should be rewarded. In
this
essay, I will discuss both views and explain them.
Firstly
, I am starting with a formal point. When schools give a
reward
for good
grades
to
students
then
it helps motivate them and
also
for other
students
, they think that if they do it the same
then
they attain a
reward
same as on them. They are doing more hard work in their studies and trying to better marks in exams.
For example
, as per a report by BBC News, the US government started
last
year new program for
students
when they perform above 90 % marks in the 12th examination, they provide a scholarship and
also
wave-off the fees for
further
higher studies, so the result after the one-year passing rate is increased more than 30% from the
last
years.
On the other hand
, when they focus on those
students
they have significantly improved the examination. If the
students
trying to level up from the past year's results
then
it is the responsibility of schools and class teachers to encourage them and
reward
them for
this
performance.
For instance
, as per a survey by the Times of India of the report, when starting
this
activity in the schools given to
reward
a significant number of
students
the literacy rate has increased in the country by 70% to 90% in the
last
decades. In conclusion, we have discussed both views and found both are equally important, good
grades
students
and show a significant improvement in
grades
. When they are rewarded for better performance, they will be motivated and encouraged for the future. If the student is doing good
then
the country's future is always better, because
students
are the future of the nation.
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