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Your recently made an online purchase and the product was not the same as the description on the website. 1)What you purchased 2)Exactly how it is different to the website description 3) How you would like the company to fix the problem

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Dear support team, I am writing
this
 letter to express my disappointment with the online purchase I made on your website. On Oct 30 , during the Halloween sale, I ordered two pairs of Black and white denim jeans waist 32 and length 40,and
also
 purchased blue sneakers in size 8. The package was delivered a week later, I received the jeans in a shorter length and the
color
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also
 did not match what I originally ordered on your website. I am extremely disappointed with the items I received.
This
 kind of service will blind your business and you might lose existing and potential customers. I would highly appreciate it if you could replace the products with the original products I have ordered. If it’s not possible to replace it , please refund the full amount for the products. Thank you for your support and understanding on
this
 matter. Expecting a prompt response from you. Yours faithfully, Dillirao.
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