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One of your friends has asked you to be a partner in his new business. Write a letter to reply to your friend’s offer. In your letter -Give your opinion of your friend’s business idea. - Tell him whether or not you have decided to accept his offer - and explain your reasons for this decision.

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Dear John, It was a nice conversation via phone call
last
 night. I think that it is a brilliant idea to start a hospitality
business
 in Dalian City since Dalian is a famous tourist city in China. I really appreciate that you consider me as your
business
due to
 trust.
However
, after elaborating, I don’t believe that I could be a suitable
business
 partner for your new
business
. There are 2 main reasons that I determined not to join your hospitality
business
.
Firstly
, I do not have any hospitality background or knowledge to support the development of your
business
.
Secondly
, I don’t have the capacity to do side
business
 at the moment as I have a full-time job in an international bank. Thanks for your offer again and I am sure that your new
business
 will run smoothly as you are a confident and talented businessman. Thanks, and Regards SJ
Submitted by shaojiedang on

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task response
Make sure to address all the points mentioned in the prompt, such as giving your opinion of the business idea.
coherence cohesion
Ensure that the logical flow between sentences and paragraphs is cohesive.
lexical resource
Use a wider range of vocabulary to enhance your written expression.
grammatical range
Pay attention to sentence structure and ensure grammatical accuracy.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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