People can eat a wide variety of food that can be grown in other areas. As a result, people eat more food produced in other regions than local food. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages.
Transportations
Fix the agreement mistake
Transportation
have
Correct subject-verb agreement
has
an
immense power to promote things worldwide. Correct article usage
apply
People
have more opportunities to taste different kinds of food
. Whereas
,some people
are more willing to enjoy the other localities’ food
. In this
essay ,I will outline the pros and cons.
To begin
with the advantages, in these times ,people
are able to improve the quality of their life. To elaborate, they will get rich nutrition by eating various food
. Fix the agreement mistake
foods
For example
, some people
who are live in the inland district have the chance to supply the Microelement by having sea
Correct your spelling
seafood
food
. Besides
, this
has a serious effects
on Correct the article-noun agreement
serious effects
a serious effect
the
global finance. Correct article usage
apply
In other words
,when people
show willing
to buy Replace the word
willingness
the
Correct article usage
apply
food
grown in other area
,it is beneficial to global currency circulation. Change the wording
another area
other areas
For example
, when Chinese
have an Correct article usage
the Chinese
interested
in Japanese Replace the word
interest
food
,they will generate the
demand Correct article usage
a
of
products import ,Change preposition
for
Correct word choice
and this
this
will promote trade between the two countries.
Correct pronoun usage
which
Furthermore
, everything has pros and cons. This
causes a lot of career problems..
When Replace the punctuation
.
...
people
do not buy the local food
, the farmer may be not cultivate
the species. Change the verb form
not cultivate
For instance
, a place is abound
in watermelons, but the residents do not have Change the verb form
abounds
passion
Correct article usage
a passion
on
it .The farmer may Change preposition
for
be not plant
it next year .After that ,the peasant who only Change the verb form
not plant
grow
watermelons will lose his job.
In conclusion ,having more enthusiasm Change the verb form
grows
on
other localities’ Change preposition
for
food
has a good development on people
’s health and the
global finance but it Correct article usage
apply
also
have
effects on career problem. The above are all the merits and demerits.Change the verb form
has
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task response
The essay lacks a clear thesis statement and does not fully address the advantages and disadvantages of eating food from other regions. Provide a clear introduction and outline the main points to be discussed in the body paragraphs.
coherence cohesion
The logical structure of the essay can be improved. Use transitional words and phrases to connect ideas within sentences and between paragraphs. Additionally, provide more supporting details and examples to strengthen your arguments.
lexical resource
Expand your vocabulary and use more precise and varied words and phrases. This will help to convey your ideas more accurately and effectively. Avoid repetitive language and consider using synonyms or alternative expressions.
grammatical range
Work on improving your grammatical range. Pay attention to sentence structure, verb tenses, and agreement. Aim for greater accuracy and avoid common errors.
Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
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Examples:
I really want to study but I’m too tired.
I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.
If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.
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