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The internet is a great source of information and has opened up opportunities for people all over the world. Is all information reliable on the internet? What could be done to control information online?

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The
internet
 is a great source of
information
 and has opened up opportunities for
people
 all over the world. Is all
information
 reliable on the
internet
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? What could be done to
control
information
 online?
People
 all across the world have more chances and access to knowledge through the
internet
. In my opinion, the majority of the
information
 that can be found on the
internet
 is reliable.
This
 essay will discuss whether all
information
 is trustworthy and what could be done to restrict knowledge on the
internet
. The reason why most
of
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information
 can be reliable is that it can be verified by various sources and
also
people
 can contest the given
information
 or news:
is
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whether is
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 it fake or not.
For instance
, media outlets not only check facts
which
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that
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 they
found
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find
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 on the
internet
, but they
also
 show
proofs
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proof
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 to the public.
However
, they will
give retraction
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 if the
information
 turns out to be fake. On
other
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the other
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 hand, not all
information
 is trustworthy and that’s why it is
significant
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important
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 to deal with misinformation and
control
 it. The downside of misinformation is it can
be
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easily influence
on
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people
 in situations
such
 as political elections.
Therefore
, I think that there should be certain measures to
control
internet
 sites and fake knowledge.
And one
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One
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 way to do
this
 is to implement fines
to
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for
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 companies that
spreading
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spread
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 false
information
. In conclusion, with the development of the
internet
people
 have increased opportunities and access to
information
 globally.
Although
 all
information
 on the
internet
seem
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seems
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 reliable, there should be measures that
control
 from spreading
untrue
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of untrue
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information
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • repository
  • accessibility
  • credibility
  • regulation
  • misinformation
  • fake news
  • biased reporting
  • public opinion
  • fact-checking
  • curate
  • digital literacy
  • discern
  • censorship
  • free speech
  • integrity
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