In many countries, children are engaged in some kind of paid work. Some people regard this as completely wrong, while others consider it as valuable work experience. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
In a lot of
countries
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countries,
children
are occupied in something similar to Use synonyms
a
paid Correct article usage
apply
work
. Use synonyms
While
somebodies consider it totally incorrect, others are convinced Linking Words
that is
beneficial Linking Words
work
experience. In my opinion, Use synonyms
i
believe that having a paid Change the capitalization
I
work
job prepare teenagers for their Use synonyms
further
future life, by building them as Linking Words
an independent individuals
. Correct the article-noun agreement
independent individuals
an independent individual
However
, Linking Words
this
may have Linking Words
a
negative consequences on their childhood.
On the one hand, many people consider Correct the article-noun agreement
apply
work
for teenagers as a bad idea, and they are quite right. Working Use synonyms
on
Change preposition
in
a
teenage Correct article usage
the
years
negatively affects on Use synonyms
child
psyche, schedule, school grades, and even relationships with friends. Change noun form
child's
This
cause a lot of stress, sometimes even anxiety, that distract Linking Words
children
from other aspects of their life. Use synonyms
That is
why many people conserved about Linking Words
this
. Take Linking Words
for example
teenage Linking Words
years
, Use synonyms
while
they have to be well educated, study for their knowledge, and live for Linking Words
a
pleasure, they are working, Remove the article
apply
what
takes a huge amount of time and bothers them to make a Correct pronoun usage
which
completed
healthy lifestyle.
Replace the word
complete
On the other hand
, having Linking Words
work
experience in Use synonyms
a
young Correct article usage
the
years
prevents Use synonyms
children
from a future unloved job, by realising what they are fond of, and making them ready for being an adult and Use synonyms
hard working
individuals. Add a hyphen
hard-working
Furthermore
, Linking Words
unfortunately
not every teenager Add a comma
unfortunately,
have
Correct subject-verb agreement
has
choice
whether to Add an article
a choice
work
or not. Sometimes they just have to do it, in order to help their parents. Use synonyms
For instance
, by saving and serving their parents, Linking Words
children
learn to be independent and thankful Use synonyms
from
a Change preposition
for
little
Correct quantifier usage
few
years
. It shows that bad circumstances can turn into a good lesson as well.
In conclusion, getting a job in Use synonyms
young
Correct article usage
the young
years
is a very significant step toward becoming an adult that makes Use synonyms
children
mature. Use synonyms
However
, if it Linking Words
engage
a lot of time in teenage childhood and Change the verb form
engages
constitute
a loss of childish memories, it will have a negative effect, that will harm Change the verb form
constitutes
young
Correct article usage
the young
aged
mindsetCorrect word choice
apply
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