The graph shows average annual expenditures on cell phone and residential phone services between 2001 and 2010.
The bar chart illustrates the average yearly expense
on
mobile Change preposition
of
phone
services
and landline
phone
services
during the period of 2001 to 2010.
Overall
, during the earlier years of the study landline
phone
services
controlled the market for communication services
, but with the evolution of technology during later years, cell phone
services
became the preferred communication service.
Starting in the year
2001, landline
phone
services
were at their all-time high averaging around 700 dollars
per year
, in
contrast
cell Add a comma
contrast,
phone
services
faced their lowest expenditure circling at around 200 dollars
the before mentioned year
. During the upcoming years, until 2010 residential phone
services
investment saw a steady decline losing around 50 to 100 dollars
per year
until it reached around 400 dollars
expended in their communication service.
Consequently
, as residential phone
services
saw a steady decline, the demand for mobile phone
services
saw a drastic increase up until the year
2010 where
it peaked at almost 800 Correct word choice
when
dollars
during that year
, surpassing landline
phones
Change noun form
phones'
phone's
highest
invested Add an article
a highest
year
. It is worth mentioning that 2006 was a crucial year
for mobile phone
services
, as it was the year
where they surpassed the amount of money invested in their service compared while
residential Change preposition
to
phone
services
decreased.Submitted by f.leyton.a on
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