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some people think that libraries are a waste of ressources and money. so computers should replace them. however,others do not agree. discuss both sides and give your opinion

#people #libraries #waste #ressources #money #computers
The
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 of libraries has decreased over the years. People
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 to go to libraries to read their
favorite
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books
 or even just to
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 and study.
Overtime
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books
 are getting used less and less.
This
 is because
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 easy it is to get an e-book just with a few clicks. You can find almost any book you're keen to read. Online
books
 mostly
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 a much lower price point with a wider range of selection. With
computer
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 it is
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also
 possible to multitask a few things at once; writing essays
while
 reading a journal that's one click away, easier access to
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various information, and the
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possibility
 of getting more sources is much higher.
Moreover
, computers are very versatile to
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 basis.
Although
 the
use
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 can be much more flexible, we can't really rely on them.
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In view
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 so much more sources that we can't trust. Another thing is when we
use
 computers,
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one
 wrong click could end up
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 losing all the
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 we have gathered. We
also
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don't
 get the same satisfaction as opening the pages of
books
 or the unique yet
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addicting
 aroma of a newly bought book In my
opinion
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 both libraries and computers are beneficial, it depends on our preference
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 to prioritize easier access or a much more reliable source.
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Make sure to clearly address both sides of the argument and provide supporting evidence for each.
coherence and cohesion
Use cohesive devices to organize your ideas and create logical connections between sentences and paragraphs.
lexical resource
Expand your vocabulary and use a wider range of synonyms and phrases to enhance your writing.
grammatical range
Pay attention to sentence structure and grammar to enhance the clarity of your writing.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • resources
  • digital literacy
  • cultural hub
  • physical books
  • tactile learning
  • cost-effective
  • digitization
  • digital divide
  • environmental impact
  • hybrid model
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