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The line graph below shows radio and television audiences throughout the day in 1992.

The line graph below shows radio and television audiences throughout the day in 1992.
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The line chart underneath compares the proportion of
population
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the population
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 who watched television or listened to
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radio
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the radio
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 in a
day
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 from
october
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October
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 to
december
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December
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in1992
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in 1992
 in the UK. The
value
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 is expressed in percentages.
Overall
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, the percentage of
population
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the population
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 listening to
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radio
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the radio
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were
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was
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 highest during the morning hours and counted least
on
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at
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 the start and end of the
day
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.
On the other hand
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,
majority
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the majority
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 of the populace watched television in the evening time. Around 4 per
cent
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 of the populace heard
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radio
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the radio
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 in the
hourse
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house
hours
 before sunrise,
after
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this
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, during the morning time the proportion of listeners
skyrocketted
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skyrocketed
 and clocked the maximum
value
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 of around 27 per
cent
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 at 8 am. In
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addition
addidtion
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addidtion,
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 the portion of
radio
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 enthusiasts plummeted down throughout the
day
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 before ending again at the first discussed
value
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. The percentage of tele viewers experienced an alternating trend in the first half of the
day
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. Starting at a little more than 5 per
cent
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people
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of people
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 watching television at 1 am,
following
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this
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, the
value
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 declined
further
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 before regaining the former proportion around 8 am.
Furthermore
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, the portion of individuals who saw broadcasted shows rose significantly, clocking the highest
value
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 of 45 per
cent
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 around 9
pm
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p.m.
 before plunging down to approximately 15 per
cent
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 at 11
pm
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p.m
.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words radio, day, value, cent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 4 times.
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