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Band 6.5

Billions of dollars are being wasted on space research. The money used could be better if used to improving condition on people on earth. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Globally
space
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 exploration is developing by nations, which increases the science enthusiasts' attention to know the
space
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 looks like. These days huge amount of money is spent on
space
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 research by governments. There is growing consensus regarding to use of money for the development of underprivileged
people
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 on the
planet
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.
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, there are vivid arguments rising against
space
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 research, which is an unavoidable subject for the upcoming generations on the
planet
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, that will be discussed in the following paragraphs. On the one hand, science is developing day by day. Humans are gaining more knowledge during the exploration of
space
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. Studying
space
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 is beneficial for human society to survive in the future.
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, the rising temperature on Earth is tidy and difficult for the upcoming generations to survive on the
planet
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 is considered a serious issue by the United Nations. Another benefit of
space
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 studies is that
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nations to predict climatic changes accurately, and governments can announce mass evacuation from dangerous areas before hazards occur
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 natural calamities.
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, spending amount for
space
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 learning is likely responsible for the ministry and the
people
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.
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, there are concerning factors lifted by the
people
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 to spend more financial support for supporting the upliftment of suffering
people
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. The life of common
people
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 is getting disastrous
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 food shortages and failure of farming
due to
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 lack of enough water.
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, wheat production has declined by 15% globally,
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 BBC reports. If the authority improved wheat farming it would be beneficial for normal
people
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 to survive.
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, the lack of medical facilities leads to detrimental effects on the health of the
people
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.
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 spending money to improve the basic needs of the
people
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 will be beneficial but spending the amount for
space
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 exploration is unavoidable.
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,
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 more financial support is necessary for the upliftment of
poor
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 community, the survival of the next generations on
planet
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 Earth and learning weather-changing issues, society have to spend significant amounts on
space
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 studies.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • billions of dollars
  • wasted
  • improving conditions
  • technological advancements
  • inspires
  • motivates
  • contributes
  • understanding of the universe
  • investment
  • indirect benefits
  • priority
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