Billions of dollars are being wasted on space research. The money used could be better if used to improving condition on people on earth. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Space research has
spend
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a lot of
money
while
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and
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those
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money
spent can actually be allocated to help condition
on
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the
earth
in several
area
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and make the
earth
worth living
for
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the next
hundreds
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years. Some people worry too much about the future and neglect the current urgent situation which is global warming. Those irresponsible who
cutting
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down the
forest
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forests
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for
the
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mining and leave the
field
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fields
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hanging without growing back
the
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tree
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trees
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are making our beloved
earth
lacking of
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trees
to absorb free radicals and carbon dioxide.
Moreover
,
this
results in bad
effect
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effects
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of global warming.
By
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this
big
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large
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amount of
money
, the international organization can bring back the
forest
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forests
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in every
country
and reduce the effect of global warming.
For instance
, the United
Nation
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can allocate billions of dollars for planting big number of
trees
in each
country
.
Therefore
, the
trees
will produce more oxygen, absorbing the carbon dioxide that the big plant industry
produced
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. The planet will less warmer and the ice
on
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in
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antartica
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Antarctica
will not start to melt down, reducing flood
number
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arise
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in every
country
. People
also
try to leave our planet and
problem
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problems
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behind,
while
actually everything still can be fixed. Thousands of dollars can help every state to fix
the
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sanitation
,
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because when
rainy
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the rainy
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season comes, floods and catastrophes happen in every developing
country
.
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, since
the
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developing countries don't have adequate sewage disposal and sanitation,
distribute
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those
cashes
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cash
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will help
thousand
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lives
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of lives
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from catastrophes and for them to improve their condition
besides
suffering from
disater
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disaster
.
To sum up
, the
money
can be used to grow back the forest as the
trees
play
crucial
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a crucial
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role in saving the
earth
and
allocate
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allocated
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to sewage disposal as it needed to be built
for
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to
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prevent flood
arises
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apply
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • billions of dollars
  • wasted
  • improving conditions
  • technological advancements
  • inspires
  • motivates
  • contributes
  • understanding of the universe
  • investment
  • indirect benefits
  • priority
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