Billions of dollars are being wasted on space research. The money used could be better if used to improving condition on people on earth. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Space research has
spend
a lot of Change the verb form
spent
money
while
Correct word choice
and
those
Change the determiner
that money
money
spent can actually be allocated to help condition on
the Change preposition
apply
earth
in several area
and make the Change to a plural noun
areas
earth
worth living for
the next Change preposition
on for
hundreds
years. Some people worry too much about the future and neglect the current urgent situation which is global warming.
Those irresponsible who Add the preposition
hundreds of
cutting
down the Wrong verb form
cut
forest
for Fix the agreement mistake
forests
the
mining and leave the Correct article usage
apply
field
hanging without growing back Fix the agreement mistake
fields
the
Correct article usage
apply
tree
are making our beloved Fix the agreement mistake
trees
earth
lacking of
Wrong verb form
lack
trees
to absorb free radicals and carbon dioxide. Moreover
, this
results in bad effect
of global warming. Fix the agreement mistake
effects
By
Change preposition
With
this
big
amount of Correct word choice
large
money
, the international organization can bring back the forest
in every Fix the agreement mistake
forests
country
and reduce the effect of global warming. For instance
, the United Nation
can allocate billions of dollars for planting big number of Fix the agreement mistake
Nations
trees
in each country
. Therefore
, the trees
will produce more oxygen, absorbing the carbon dioxide that the big plant industry produced
. The planet will less warmer and the ice Wrong verb form
produces
on
Change preposition
in
antartica
will not start to melt down, reducing flood Correct your spelling
Antarctica
number
Fix the agreement mistake
numbers
arise
in every Verb problem
apply
country
.
People also
try to leave our planet and problem
behind, Fix the agreement mistake
problems
while
actually everything still can be fixed. Thousands of dollars can help every state to fix the
sanitationCorrect article usage
apply
,
because when Remove the comma
apply
rainy
season comes, floods and catastrophes happen in every developing Add an article
the rainy
country
. For example
, since the
developing countries don't have adequate sewage disposal and sanitation, Correct article usage
apply
distribute
those Wrong verb form
distributing
cashes
will help Change the wording
cash
amounts of cash
flows of cash
fistfuls of cash
thousand
Change the article
a thousand
lives
from catastrophes and for them to improve their condition Change preposition
of lives
besides
suffering from disater
.
Correct your spelling
disaster
To sum up
, the money
can be used to grow back the forest as the trees
play crucial
role in saving the Add an article
a crucial
earth
and allocate
to sewage disposal as it needed to be built Wrong verb form
allocated
for
prevent floodChange preposition
to
arises
.Verb problem
apply
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