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The charts show world pineapple exports by the top three pineapple-producing countries in 2009 and 2019, and a breakdown of the cost to the consumer of each pineapple in 2019. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.

The charts show world pineapple exports by the top three pineapple-producing countries in 2009 and 2019, and a breakdown of the cost to the consumer of each pineapple in 2019. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.
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The charts delineate the exporting of
pineapple
global
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globally
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 by
top
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the top
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 three
pineapple
-producing countries in a period time from 2009 to 2019
as well as
 a breakdown of the price to the consumer of
pineapple
 in 2019.
Overall
, the quantity of
pineapple
 exports
are
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is
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 presented by 2 two distinctive columns which use metric tonnes to show the production of
pineapple
 from each
country
.
Observable
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Observably
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, the figures for
country
 A
reach
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reached
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 the peak of the chart in 2019,
while
 the production of
country
 C in 2009 hit the bottom out at about less than a million. There is
also
 a diagram showing the proportion of the cost to the consumer of each
pineapple
 in 2019. Seven breakdowns are divided, the highest is distribution and retail
while
 account for 4% - reach the lowest point are
export
 costs. In 2009 the figure
of
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for
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pineapple
export
 from
country
 A
is
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was
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 a little bit more than 1 million but it has skyrocketed to more than 10 million in 2019. Needless to say, in 2019 every single
country
 witnessed a
numerous
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large
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 decline in the proportion of
pineapple
export
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exports
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. Distribution and retail account for more than a third of the total and it is much more higher than the rest. The other costs that made up the total cost were
export
cost
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costs
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, international transport costs, …
.which
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which
 were less than a quarter of the total proportion.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 92%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words pineapple, country, export with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reach" was used 2 times.
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