Millions of dollars are spent on space research every year . Some people argue that the money should spent on improving living standards on Earth . Do you agree or disagree ?

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year ,
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the universe
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think that living standards on Earth should provide more and more .
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accept
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argument is remarkably reasonable , I believe that the latter idea is the better way and
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writer will explain the reason why . It is vital to understand that launching rockets into
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space
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year is expensive .
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plenty of countries spent
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new planet that
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life .
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of carbon dioxide
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to air pollution .
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control of overpopulation , the Earth
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enough places to live .
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,
people
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space
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with the aim of serving
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people
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lives but
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not have effective result . Another key component of the case for
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finance
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cost
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of living to provide
humas
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humans
human
. It should
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that living conditions will be improved ,
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environment will be less polluted .
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equipments
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of
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or buildings
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citizens
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so that the
space
will widen for individuals .
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eleminate
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eliminated
in the city if
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invest
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accomdation
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accommodation
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round
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noticed
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that , individuals do not use all of
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to develop or build
accomadations
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accommodations
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way
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of life are valid arguments for individuals to consider .
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of
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are
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neccessary
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necessary
and valuable in living
institues
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institutes
.
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coherence cohesion
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lexical resource
Expand your vocabulary and use more varied and appropriate language.
grammatical range
Pay attention to grammar and sentence structure to improve accuracy.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • space exploration
  • scientific discoveries
  • cutting-edge technology
  • pioneering research
  • socio-economic development
  • improved healthcare
  • education
  • poverty alleviation
  • infrastructure
  • balanced approach
  • cost-effective
  • prioritize
  • allocate
  • resources
  • budget
  • investment
  • sustainable development
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