Million of dollars are spent on space research every year. Some people argue that the moeny should be spent on improving living standards on Earth. Do you agree or disagree ?

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year,
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million
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millions
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of
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on discovering
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space
instead
of spending that amount of money on developing the Earth's living
condition
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. The author of
this
essay would agree with the idea of improving
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human's
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daily lives because it would make no sense if humans do not have
good
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condition
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conditions
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of living and they can not earn the
moeny
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money
to continue
making
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space research. First of
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,
million
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of
dollars
spend
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on space research would help many residents in the
undeveloping
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undeveloped
nations. The
goverments
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governments
government
of Africa's nations do not have the ability to afford for the local
people
one hundred percent of good living conditions. Those countries
own
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not up to standard facilities and have
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amount of
unemployments
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unemployment
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or
low-salaries
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low salaries
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for
people
so that they can not afford
them
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a better life.
Due to
that,
million
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millions
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of
dollars
should
be spend
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on improving the standard of living for
people
who still have to live and work in a bad living condition.
Besides
that, those
million
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of
dollars
coul
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help
improving
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the healthcare of
human
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. Several
pandamics
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pandemics
pandemic
passed by without the preparation of
people
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to a lot of lives
were
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taken.
However
, if we spend an amount of meny use on discovering spacecraft - which is the definition
human
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still
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about
on
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building more
qualitied
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qualified
hospitals on over the world to improve
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healthcare. There are still so many
people
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not afford the
bil
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bill
of medicines
due to
the reason of its limitation.
However
, if we spent more passion on researching
the
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medicines for
people
and improving the
equipments
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in the hospital, we still save many lives who are urgently in
the
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need of help.
Therefore
, the money
spending
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on discovering the spacecraft in recent years, in my view, we should take those
million
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of
dollars
to improve
the
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human's
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living
standard
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standards
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as improving
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improve
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the
life
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lives
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of
people
in Africa or
developing
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the
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healthcare. All of that would help to increase the standards of
human's
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living on Earth.

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