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Million of dollars are spent on space research every year. Some people argue that the moeny should be spent on improving living standards on Earth. Do you agree or disagree ?

#million #dollars #space #research #year #people #moeny #standards #earth
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every
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 year,
human
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spent
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million
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millions
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 of
dollar
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dollars
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 on discovering
the
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space
instead
 of spending that amount of money on developing the Earth's living
condition
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conditions
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. The author of
this
 essay would agree with the idea of improving
the
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human's
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human
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 daily lives because it would make no sense if humans do not have
good
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a good
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condition
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conditions
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 of living and they can not earn the
moeny
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money
 to continue
making
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doing
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 space research. First of
al
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all
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,
million
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millions
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 of
dollars
spend
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 on space research would help many residents in the
undeveloping
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undeveloped
 nations. The
goverments
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governments
government
 of Africa's nations do not have the ability to afford for the local
people
 one hundred percent of good living conditions. Those countries
own
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 not up to standard facilities and have
big
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a big
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 amount of
unemployments
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unemployment
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 or
low-salaries
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low salaries
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 for
people
 so that they can not afford
them
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a better life.
Due to
 that,
million
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millions
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 of
dollars
 should
be spend
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be spent
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 on improving the standard of living for
people
 who still have to live and work in a bad living condition.
Besides
 that, those
million
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millions
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 of
dollars
coul
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could
 help
improving
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improve
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 the healthcare of
human
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humans
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. Several
pandamics
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pandemics
pandemic
 passed by without the preparation of
people
lead
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 to a lot of lives
were
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being
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 taken.
However
, if we spend an amount of meny use on discovering spacecraft - which is the definition
human
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humans
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 still
argued
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 about
on
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building more
qualitied
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qualified
 hospitals on over the world to improve
human's
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human
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 healthcare. There are still so many
people
can
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who can
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 not afford the
bil
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bill
 of medicines
due to
 the reason of its limitation.
However
, if we spent more passion on researching
the
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medicines for
people
 and improving the
equipments
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equipment
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pieces of equipment
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 in the hospital, we still save many lives who are urgently in
the
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need of help.
Therefore
, the money
spending
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 on discovering the spacecraft in recent years, in my view, we should take those
million
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millions
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 of
dollars
 to improve
the
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human's
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human
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 living
standard
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standards
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as improving
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improve
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 the
life
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lives
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 of
people
 in Africa or
developing
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develop
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the
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healthcare. All of that would help to increase the standards of
human's
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humans
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 living on Earth.

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