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you have just read an article in a national newspaper which claims that town centers in your country all look very similar to each other you don't fully agree with this opinion. write a letter to the editor of the newspaper. In your letter say which points in the article you agree with explain ways in which your town center is different from most other town centers Offered to give a guided tour of your town to the writer of the article

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Dear sir;
Iam
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I am
 writing to the editor who has written
this
 article in the national newspaper . since I have read your article
this
 morning. I would like to highlight on issues that you claims I agree with your perspective that
centre
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the centre
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 of town has more beneficial facilities than usual ,
Such
 as the
re-creation
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recreation
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 centres ,luxury
market
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markets
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 and global brands.
Furthermore
, I would like to bring to your attention some merits which; we have in downtown. First of all Modified infrastructure
such
 as water drainage for heavy rain during
Autumn
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the Autumn
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 season.
Also
,
presence
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the presence
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 of historical heritage And landmarks
create
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creates
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 a tourist attraction places and global investment
t
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to
provide variability of Business jobs and work.
In
addition
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addition,
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 the farms and green land around the city where planting different vegetables and
fruist
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fruits
fruit
lead to establishment
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of
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ahuge
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a huge
huge
markets and restaurants Which allow all living facilities.
Finally
, I would like to offer
for
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apply
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you a guided tour to see the highlighting things that I mentioned above. Thank you for your understanding gratefully yours
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coherence cohesion
Provide more specific examples to support your points.
lexical resource
Use a wider range of vocabulary to enhance your response.
grammatical range
Check for minor grammar mistakes and consider using more complex sentence structures.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • I am writing in response to
  • the article published in your newspaper
  • I would like to express my disagreement with
  • the claim made in the article that
  • I agree with some points raised in the article
  • However, I believe that there are significant differences in my town center
  • One notable difference is
  • Another way in which my town center stands out is
  • Furthermore,
  • In addition to
  • I would be more than happy to offer
  • a guided tour of my town
  • to the writer of the article
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