The following diagram shows how greenhouse gases trap energy from the Sun.

The following diagram shows how greenhouse gases trap energy from the Sun.
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The diagram below illustrates the way in which
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gases
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trap energy emitted by the Sun. I will discuss three things that can occur for the heat energy released from the Sun and the impact made by humanity that favours one of the discussed outcomes.
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, there is a layer on Earth called the atmosphere, which deflects a portion of the light that comes from the outside,
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, not all heat from the Sun reaches the surface.
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, the heat may deflect from the ground and travel away towards space.
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, a fraction of
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energy becomes trapped in our planet by the
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gases
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present in the sky. Unfortunately, human activities lead to an increase in the presence of CO2 in the air.
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, people have cut trees for a long time, but recently the pace at which it is done has skyrocketed.
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leads to fewer
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gases
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being absorbed by the trees.
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, cars and factories that our civilisation perform combustion with carbon dioxide (one of the
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) being produced and released. These factors combined result in the increase in concentration of the heat-trapping molecules.
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