In some cities and towns all over the world, the high volume of traffic is a problem. What are the cause of this and what actions can be taken to solve this problem?

The high quantity of
vehicle
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vehicles
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makes
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causes
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heavy
traffic
in several big cities and there are a few causes that led to
this
mess. Some actions can be
done
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to tackle
this
chaos caused by high volume. In busy hours, most people will stuck in heavy
traffic
and end up
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spending
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more
times
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time
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than
normal
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in normal
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traffic
. In fact,
this
catastrophe happens because lack of adequate public
transportation
. Citizens
often
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confused
how
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about how
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to commute and they think that by using current public
transportation
, they still need to walk more than five
kilometers
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to
finally
find a bus stop. Apparently, they find it ineffective and prefer to own
car
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a car
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or motorcycle, so they can minimize the count of their step.
Moreover
, a
car
usually only have a passenger,
which
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and
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if every person drives a
car
then
imagine how many
car
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cars
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will be on the main street after working hour. Certainly, all
this problem
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these problems
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can be solved by investing
on
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proper public
transportation
. Even though the construction will take a few years, all of
this
will be
worth
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and the
traffic
jump can be reduced gradually.
Also
, the government need to acknowledge and encourage everyone to choose
local
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a local
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train or bus to commute
instead
of buying a new vehicle, for the sake of citizens'
convenient
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. By doing so, people will spend less time
on
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driving and eventually
saving
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their energy to study or work.
To sum up
, the
causes
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cause
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of
high
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the high
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volume of
traffic
is
due to
inadequate
transportation
facilities.
However
, the solution to all of
this
trouble is to insist the government
in brainstorming
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brainstorm
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the mastermind plan
of
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for
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public
transportation
and fasten the construction, so it can prevent everyone from being stuck
on
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in
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the high volume
traffic
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of traffic
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.
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task response
Make sure to address all parts of the essay prompt in a clear and direct manner. Expand on the causes of traffic congestion and elaborate on the proposed solutions.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • traffic congestion
  • urbanization
  • car ownership
  • public transportation
  • carpooling
  • cycling infrastructure
  • congestion pricing
  • population growth
  • commute
  • sustainable transport
  • traffic management
  • ride-sharing
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