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In some cities and towns all over the world, the high volume of traffic is a problem. What are the cause of this and what actions can be taken to solve this problem?

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The high quantity of
vehicle
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vehicles
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makes
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causes
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 heavy
traffic
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 in several big cities and there are a few causes that led to
this
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 mess. Some actions can be
done
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taken
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 to tackle
this
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 chaos caused by high volume. In busy hours, most people will stuck in heavy
traffic
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 and end up
to spent
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spending
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 more
times
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time
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 than
normal
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in normal
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traffic
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. In fact,
this
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 catastrophe happens because lack of adequate public
transportation
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. Citizens
often
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are often
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 confused
how
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about how
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 to commute and they think that by using current public
transportation
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, they still need to walk more than five
kilometers
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 to
finally
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 find a bus stop. Apparently, they find it ineffective and prefer to own
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car
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a car
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 or motorcycle, so they can minimize the count of their step.
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, a
car
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 usually only have a passenger,
which
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and
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 if every person drives a
car
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then
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 imagine how many
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car
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cars
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 will be on the main street after working hour. Certainly, all
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this problem
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these problems
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 can be solved by investing
on
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in
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 proper public
transportation
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. Even though the construction will take a few years, all of
this
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 will be
worth
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worthwhile
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 and the
traffic
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 jump can be reduced gradually.
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, the government need to acknowledge and encourage everyone to choose
local
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a local
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 train or bus to commute
instead
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 of buying a new vehicle, for the sake of citizens'
convenient
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convenience
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. By doing so, people will spend less time
on
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apply
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driving and eventually
saving
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save
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 their energy to study or work.
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, the
causes
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cause
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 of
high
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the high
a high
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 volume of
traffic
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 is
due to
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 inadequate
transportation
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 facilities.
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, the solution to all of
this
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 trouble is to insist the government
in brainstorming
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brainstorm
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 the mastermind plan
of
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for
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 public
transportation
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 and fasten the construction, so it can prevent everyone from being stuck
on
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in
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 the high volume
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traffic
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of traffic
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task response
Make sure to address all parts of the essay prompt in a clear and direct manner. Expand on the causes of traffic congestion and elaborate on the proposed solutions.
coherence cohesion
The overall structure of the essay is logical, but some sentences and ideas could be better connected to enhance coherence. Consider using transitional phrases and connectors to smoothly transition between ideas.
lexical resource
Your use of vocabulary is generally good, but try to incorporate more varied and precise vocabulary to make your essay more engaging. Additionally, pay attention to collocations and word choice to avoid minor errors.
grammatical range
Your grammar is mostly accurate, but there are occasional errors in sentence structure, verb tense, and subject-verb agreement. Take extra care to review and proofread your sentences for clarity and correctness.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • traffic congestion
  • urbanization
  • car ownership
  • public transportation
  • carpooling
  • cycling infrastructure
  • congestion pricing
  • population growth
  • commute
  • sustainable transport
  • traffic management
  • ride-sharing
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