To what extent do you agree or disagree with the statement that oil, jungle, water, and other natural resources are being used too much? What are the main causes of this issue and what do you believe is the best possible solution? Provide reasons and examples to support your viewpoint."
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oil, jungle,water and other natural Remove the comma
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resources
are being used too much.The main cause of Use synonyms
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people try to build new cities even in forested Add a missing verb
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The main reason why Use synonyms
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the planet's
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people are taking ownership of new lands and opening up various environmentally harmful enterprises, Add a missing verb
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forests just to get rich. Linking Words
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are decreasing and the gas produced by various enterprises contains toxic substances, and Use synonyms
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gas is not only harmful to natureLinking Words
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harmful to the animal world. Linking Words
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, used natural Use synonyms
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The solution that I believe would be most effective is that there are various steps that the government could take to tackle these problems. Linking Words
Initially
, they could encourage the use of renewable and sustainable energy from solar, wind, or water power. So, they could grant subsidies or adopt Linking Words
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eco-friendly industries Change preposition
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such
as the electronic vehicle business. Linking Words
Moreover
, politicians have the right to impose laws and punitive penalties on companies, which could help to limit the release of exhaust fumes or sewage and Linking Words
to
reduce deforestation as well. Verb problem
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In addition
to investing more in technological advances in order to mitigate these environmental problems. Linking Words
For example
: about two years ago, the government of Canada issued a law on the conservation of natural Linking Words
resources
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method was effective.
In conclusion, the reason for the overuse of natural Linking Words
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is that people sacrifice these Use synonyms
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for their own income without thinking about nature, and governments should certainly implement a range of measures to preserve natural Use synonyms
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and save the environment.Use synonyms
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