To what extent do you agree or disagree with the statement that oil, jungle, water, and other natural resources are being used too much? What are the main causes of this issue and what do you believe is the best possible solution? Provide reasons and examples to support your viewpoint."
It is true that
,
oil, jungle,water and other natural Remove the comma
apply
resources
are being used too much.The main cause of this
issue that
people try to build new cities even in forested Add a missing verb
is that
areas
and the best possible solution is governments should do much more to curb the exploitation of these non-renewable resources
.
The main reason why planet's
Correct article usage
the planet's
resources
are expended that
people are taking ownership of new lands and opening up various environmentally harmful enterprises, Add a missing verb
is that
favoring
natural Change the spelling
favouring
resources
and also
forests just to get rich. As a result
of this
, forest areas
are decreasing and the gas produced by various enterprises contains toxic substances, and this
gas is not only harmful to nature,
but Remove the comma
apply
also
harmful to the animal world. In addition
, in many urban areas
and enterprises, natural resources
are now being used extensively for daily needs and production. For example
, according to
last
year's report, the world's population, especially in urban areas
, used natural resources
for various modern technologies without stopping due to
extreme cold.
The solution that I believe would be most effective is that there are various steps that the government could take to tackle these problems. Initially
, they could encourage the use of renewable and sustainable energy from solar, wind, or water power. So, they could grant subsidies or adopt favorable
policies Change the spelling
favourable
to
eco-friendly industries Change preposition
for
such
as the electronic vehicle business. Moreover
, politicians have the right to impose laws and punitive penalties on companies, which could help to limit the release of exhaust fumes or sewage and to
reduce deforestation as well. Verb problem
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In addition
to investing more in technological advances in order to mitigate these environmental problems. For example
: about two years ago, the government of Canada issued a law on the conservation of natural resources
and the use of certain amounts by law, and after some time this
method was effective.
In conclusion, the reason for the overuse of natural resources
is that people sacrifice these resources
for their own income without thinking about nature, and governments should certainly implement a range of measures to preserve natural resources
and save the environment.Submitted by i.nuraliyev on
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