Some people think that the government should use extra money to fund programs to improve the environment. Others think that it is better for the government to spend money to support artistic programs. Which option do you prefer? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

Contrary to other opinions, the government of a society have more roles to play than they seem to acknowledge.

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a number of citizens have the perception that the government should have a separate budget to fund programs that will improve

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society, the rest think they should rather support the growth of

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programs.

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essay will explain why I prefer the financial investment in

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program

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better.

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, it will save on cost and

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if well managed,funding the artistic projects is geared towards individual empowerment

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means a better

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. It is more

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for the political administration of a society. Because most community development projects necessitate millions of gross income, a cheaper alternative is available which will still be of benefit to the civilisation.

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2010 plan for Nigeria kickstarted in 2007, the

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administration of President Yaradua estimated 10 billion

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which was almost half of the nation's national income meanwhile an alternative like TY Bello's photography scheme only required 25% of the same amount. If frugal decisions are not made other areas of a country's development would suffer the consequences. Artistic programs that focus on individual development and empowerment will ultimately be of benefit to the

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in the long run. Though it may not seem like it at the beginning, a popular saying goes

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: " empower an individual and you empower a nation". Only motivated and patriotic citizens will consider

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improvement and betterment of their vicinities so it is high time the investment in Human Resources and

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is practised. A perfect example was the contributions made by

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Ambode in 2019

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scheme ended up generating thousands of youths

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started their own businesses and in

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went ahead to support other

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organisations. In

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funding artists can improve the

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. In conclusion,we may never have closure on the

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whether larger sums of money should be pumped into the economy or into artistic organisations but

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essay has been able to explain why the latter option is

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and that it

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improves the

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Nov 1, 2023

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Ensure that all aspects of the prompt are addressed in the essay. Discuss why funding artistic programs is better than funding environmental programs in more detail.

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Organize the essay more effectively. Create clear topic sentences for each paragraph and use appropriate transition words to connect ideas.

lexical resource

Expand your vocabulary and use more precise and academic language. Avoid repetitive phrasing.

grammatical range

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

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Task Achievement: 6.0

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Topic Vocabulary:

allocate
allocate funds
environmental conservation
renewable energy
sustainable development
protect wildlife
reduce pollution
promote sustainability
artistic development
cultural expression
creative industries
nurture talent
artistic innovation
enrich society
budget allocation
prioritize
public opinion
government responsibility
social welfare
public wellbeing

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