There is an increasing trend around the world of married couple deciding not to have children. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages for couples who decide to do this.

People are getting married at
the
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specified age. So, there is an increase in number of married
couples
in the world. Married
couples
enjoy their
life
happily.From
this
, there are more married
couples
who get married soon and some decide to lead their without
baby
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.
Overall
, we would suggest that we are blessed to have
children
for
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our
life
. We should
take
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any wrong
decision
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for
children
. We the parents should take care of our own
children
and make
thir
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their
life
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lives
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bright
full
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and full
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. As there is a rise in the
couples
in the society.Some
new
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married ones
decides
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to live their
life
without
children
and some have more
children
. They can lead their
life
happily without
children
is becoming
trend
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now. Both the male and female mainly focus on their work but not
for
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on
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the
children
. Their main goal is to earn a lot and enjoy their
life
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full of joy. The
advantages
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advantage
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is that they won't get distracted easily. The members
in
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the family will be less
whereas
the expenses
also
will be less for them. These are some advantages who don't have
a
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children
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children
. There is a disadvantage too, the
elder
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parents will feel a lot for
this
stupid decision. Many
couples
does
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do
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not give
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importance
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to
this
and they will be disappointed in
future
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days.
This
would lead them to stay alone at the
last
stage of their
life
,
there
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money
do
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not speak only relationship plays
vital
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role. They will seek
for
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the
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care, affection, love and etc at
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the lastest
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lastest
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stage. There would
some
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drawbacks
at
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in
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the future for
family
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families
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. Everyone in society will create a bad impact on us, that makes us
to
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more bad and will lead to wrong decisions
finally
. We conclude by saying that
children
are important
for
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our
life
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lives
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.We have the parents will have more
responbilites
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responsibilities
on our
life
.If we have
children
our
life
will be
fulfilled
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with happiness. So, giving birth to
child
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a child
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is important.
The
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couples
should not take
wrong
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a wrong
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decision
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decisions
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at
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future
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it will get
affect
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.
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