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Nowadays, people have little awareness of the importance of the natural world. What are the reasons and how can people learn more about the natural world?

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There is no doubt that nowadays
people
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 do not take care of
nature
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.
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, they harm
nature
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 by throwing waste. Nowadays, most of the
people
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 are harming
nature
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instead
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 of protecting it. It would be correct to say that
people
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 are doing more harm than good to
nature
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. If we say it with a proverb, "the water flowing in front of you has no value". If
people
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 contributed to the flourishing of
nature
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, they would protect it. They think that
nature
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 has always been
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 a flourishing holiday. If
people
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 had thought about the consequences of harming the
environment
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, maybe they would not have done these things. The
environment
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 is getting worse day by day. We must encourage
people
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 to protect
nature
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. For
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, we need to plant more trees or plants, to reduce littering, we need to impose a certain amount of fines on
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 who litter, and we need to increase the number of festivals to save the
environment
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. It should not be done by the government alone. We all have a responsibility to rescue
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 cases. Because
people
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 should know that
nature
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also
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 has an end. If we preserve
nature
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, it will have a good effect on future generations. They
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 do not harm the
environment
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, following our example. In conclusion, we are all responsible for the cleanliness of the
environment
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.We should keep
nature
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 as clean as we keep our house.
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