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Nowadays, people have little awareness of the importance of the natural world. What are the reasons and how can people learn more about the natural world?

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There is no doubt that nowadays
people
 do not take care of
nature
.
Instead
, they harm
nature
 by throwing waste. Nowadays, most of the
people
 are harming
nature
instead
 of protecting it. It would be correct to say that
people
 are doing more harm than good to
nature
. If we say it with a proverb, "the water flowing in front of you has no value". If
people
 contributed to the flourishing of
nature
, they would protect it. They think that
nature
 has always been
such
 a flourishing holiday. If
people
 had thought about the consequences of harming the
environment
, maybe they would not have done these things. The
environment
 is getting worse day by day. We must encourage
people
 to protect
nature
. For
this
, we need to plant more trees or plants, to reduce littering, we need to impose a certain amount of fines on
people
 who litter, and we need to increase the number of festivals to save the
environment
. It should not be done by the government alone. We all have a responsibility to rescue
such
 cases. Because
people
 should know that
nature
also
 has an end. If we preserve
nature
, it will have a good effect on future generations. They
also
 do not harm the
environment
, following our example. In conclusion, we are all responsible for the cleanliness of the
environment
.We should keep
nature
 as clean as we keep our house.
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