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millions of dollars are spent on space research every year. some peope argue that the money should spent on improving living standards on earth. do you agree or disagree

#millions #dollars #space #research #year #peope #money #standards #earth
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many
people
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 believe that
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 huge amount of
money
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 should be spent on
space
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research
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everyyear
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every year
.
whereas
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 others think that it is more
nescessary
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necessary
 to
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thes
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this
money
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 on improving
iving
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living
 standards on earth. it is the the opinion of
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 writer that
money
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 should be spent on improving living standards on
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 rather than on
space
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research
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. it is vital to understand that once
space
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research
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gain
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 any result it will be a very big achievement for many
scientist
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.
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 the fact that
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 is still a big mystery for
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 as we have not
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 much of it
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as a
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consequence
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if
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of
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 the
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 success
people
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 will
spent
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 more
money
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 on it
for
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a
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 hope that they can find more
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 in
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 or even if they do not success they will still
spent
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 more
money
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 for a hope that
they
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cn
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can
 find something out there on
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. both will
lend
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lead
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 to
a
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the
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 result that
this
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 country will become poorer because the
goverment
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government
 has
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increase
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 the tax,
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 will make the living standard even decrease.
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, a plan to use
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money
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the money
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on improving
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to improve
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 living
standard
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standards
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 will lead to
better
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a better
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result
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results
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. another key component of the case for
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money
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 on improving living standards is that if the living standard increased the living conditions will
increase
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 and the
people
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's
condition
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conditions
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 will
increase
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,
this
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 will make
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 country become richer and
then
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 there will be more
money
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 to spent on
space
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research
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 with worry about the living condition.
thus
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, it can be seen that the decision to spend
money
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 on improving the living standard or
space
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research
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 are
valid
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a valid
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argument
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arguments
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 for
people
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 to consider,
therefore
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 it should be demonstrated that
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increase
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increasing
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 living
standard
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standards
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 are
nescessary
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necessary
 for many countries.
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