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millions of dollars are spent on space research every year. some peope argue that the money should spent on improving living standards on earth. do you agree or disagree

#millions #dollars #space #research #year #peope #money #standards #earth
many
people
 believe that
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 huge amount of
money
 should be spent on
space
research
everyyear
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every year
.
whereas
 others think that it is more
nescessary
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necessary
 to
spent
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thes
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this
money
 on improving
iving
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living
 standards on earth. it is the the opinion of
this
 writer that
money
 should be spent on improving living standards on
earth
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 rather than on
space
research
. it is vital to understand that once
space
research
gain
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 any result it will be a very big achievement for many
scientist
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scientists
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.
due to
 the fact that
space
 is still a big mystery for
people
 as we have not
explore
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 much of it
and
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as a
consequence
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consequence,
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if
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of
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 the
research
 success
people
 will
spent
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 more
money
 on it
for
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in
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a
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the
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 hope that they can find more
thing
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things
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 in
space
 or even if they do not success they will still
spent
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 more
money
 for a hope that
they
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they are
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cn
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can
 find something out there on
space
. both will
lend
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lead
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 to
a
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the
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 result that
this
 country will become poorer because the
goverment
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government
 has
increase
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 the tax,
this
 will make the living standard even decrease.
therefore
, a plan to use
money
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the money
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on improving
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to improve
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 living
standard
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standards
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 will lead to
better
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a better
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result
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results
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. another key component of the case for
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spending
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money
 on improving living standards is that if the living standard increased the living conditions will
increase
 and the
people
's
condition
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conditions
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 will
increase
,
this
 will make
this
 country become richer and
then
 there will be more
money
 to spent on
space
research
 with worry about the living condition.
thus
, it can be seen that the decision to spend
money
 on improving the living standard or
space
research
 are
valid
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a valid
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argument
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arguments
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 for
people
 to consider,
therefore
 it should be demonstrated that
increase
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increasing
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 living
standard
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standards
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 are
nescessary
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necessary
 for many countries.
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