The chart shows the average number of hours each day that Chinese, American, Turkish and Brazilian tourists spent doing leisure activities while on holiday in Greece in August 2019.
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bar charts show the Correct determiner usage
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figures
Chinese
, American, Turkish and Brazilian tourists spent
time doing activities Correct pronoun usage
who spent
whereas
on holiday in Greece in August 2019. It is clear from the graph that Correct word choice
while
the
reading books is the highest number, Correct article usage
apply
while
the lowest figurer
is visiting pleases.
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figure
According to
what is shown, Correct article usage
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the
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Chinese
tourist has Correct article usage
the longest
longest
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the longest
hours
take to
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reading
books Wrong verb form
read
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at
with
8 Change preposition
at
hours
per day. Moreover
, the tourist
in Brazil spend more Fix the agreement mistake
tourists
hours
in
the beach about 6 Change preposition
on
hours
per day. However
, the Turkish and American group
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groups
visiting
places Wrong verb form
visited
around
3 Change preposition
for around
hours
in
the day.
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during
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,
Turkish and Brazil spend Remove the comma
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total
of 4 Add an article
a total
hours
each reading books. On the other hands
, the tourist of Fix the agreement mistake
hand
Chinese
takes 1 hour to visiting
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visit
please
.
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, please
To sum up
, we can see that the reading book
in Fix the agreement mistake
books
Chinese
group is twice Correct article usage
the Chinese
than
other countries. Change preposition
as in
Also
, the
all tourists spend Remove the article
apply
less hour
than other activities.Fix the agreement mistake
fewer hours
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