38.The charts below give information about USA marriage and divorce rates between 1970 and 2000, and the marital status of adult Americans in two of the years. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

38.The charts below give information about USA marriage and divorce rates between 1970 and 2000, and the marital status of adult Americans in two of the years. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
The bar graphs display the cases of marriage and
divorce
from 1970 to 2000 and the marital status of individuals in the same period of time in the United States.
Overall
, marriage decreased during the
years
,
while
divorce
fluctuated. The significant feature of the
secod
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second
graph is that married people had a many times greater percentage than any other status in both
years
. In 1970, 2.5
million
of
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individuals were married and
this
was maintained in 1980, but in the next 10
years
, it dropped moderately by 0.1
million
,
while
in 2000 it
decline
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declined
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dramatically to 2
million
. There were 1
million
cases of
divorce
in 1970, and
this
rose sharply in the next 10
years
, to 1.4
million
,
then
it went down to 1.1
million
in 1990 and in 2000 it fell back to 1
million
. Married people had the highest proportion compared to the other
status
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states
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in both
years
, in 1970, it had a percentage of 70%,
while
in 2000 it dropped by 10%, to 60%. Followed by those who were never married, with 15% and 20% in 1970 and 2000 respectively.
Widows
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people had a similar percentage in both
years
, in 1970, it was 9% and in the next 30
years
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years,
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it decreased by 1%.
Finally
, there were very few cases of
divorce
in 1970, with only 2%,
this
grew significantly to 10% in 2000.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words divorce, years, million with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "graphs" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.

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