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the maps show the of stokeford in 1930 and 2010. write a repost of at least 150 words, summarizing the main features and make comparison where relevant

the maps show the of stokeford in 1930 and 2010. write a repost of at least 150 words, summarizing the main features and make comparison where relevant
The given maps illustrate development that had taken place in Stokeford town from 1939 to 2010. By and large, the city transformation included the replacement of the entire farming area with new buildings and the reconstruction of old buildings.
To begin
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 with, the town had two large agricultural areas which were situated
in
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on
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southwest
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the southwest
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 and northeast sides of the city. The northwest farmland was replaced by houses in order to expand the residence complex. In total, there were 14 additional houses that replaced the farm up until 2010. The replacement of
northeast
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the northeast
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 farm included the construction of
new
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a new
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 residence complex that consisted of 9 houses. Another new construction took place
in
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on
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 the west side of the town which two shops had
demolished
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been demolished
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 and replaced with housings. The primary school building was extended and new
housings
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housing
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in
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on
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south
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the south
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 side of the school was built in the area that used to be gardens.
Moreover
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, the large house had been renovated and changed
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as
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a
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 retirement house.

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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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