The graph below shows the number of enquiries received by the Tourist Information Office in one city over a six-month period in 2011. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the number of enquiries received by the Tourist Information Office in one city over a six-month period in 2011.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The graph demonstrates the
number
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of
enquiries
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recieved
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received
by the tourist Information Office in a city over a six-month period in 2011.
Overall
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it is clear that
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,
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apply
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enquiries
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from
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by
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telephone
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a telephone
the telephone
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is
in
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at
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the peak
by
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of
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900
persons
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people
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in January. Meanwhile, information requested by letter/email was
drasatically
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drastically
dramatically
reduced in 6 months. In the
begining
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beginning
, the
number
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of persons has enquired via letter and email was drastically reduced and
enquiries
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by telephone were increased.
While
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enquiries
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apply
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by
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apply
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in person
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were
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was
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were
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more aggressively increased in the six months. There
was
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were
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an
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apply
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compulsory changes that
has
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apply
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happened even in a month. The
number
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of persons
requested
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who requested
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information through
letter
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letters
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and
email
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emails
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has reduced because of
dominant
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the dominant
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role of telephone
call
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calls
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.
In contrast
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, the total
number
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of
enquiries
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have
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apply
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received during
the
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apply
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January month was approximately
same
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the same
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in
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apply
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amount. Later by comparing other modes
communication
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of communication
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, the individuals who have
went
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gone
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directly to
tourist
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the tourist
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office are the most.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 77%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words number, enquiries with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "information" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "reduced" was used 3 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • number of inquiries
  • Tourist Information Office
  • six-month period
  • increased steadily
  • reached a peak
  • decreased slightly
  • increased dramatically
  • experienced a gradual decline
  • general trend
  • highest number
  • lowest number
  • significant increase
  • tourism interest
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