The graph below shows the number of enquiries received by the Tourist Information Office in one city over a six-month period in 2011. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The graph demonstrates the
number
of enquiries
recieved
by the tourist Information Office in a city over a six-month period in 2011.
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received
Overall
it is clear that
,
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apply
enquiries
from
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by
telephone
is Add an article
a telephone
the telephone
in
the peak Change preposition
at
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900 Change preposition
of
persons
in January. Meanwhile, information requested by letter/email was Replace the word
people
drasatically
reduced in 6 months.
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drastically
dramatically
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, the Correct your spelling
beginning
number
of persons has enquired via letter and email was drastically reduced and enquiries
by telephone were increased. While
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by
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were
was
more aggressively increased in the six months. There Correct subject-verb agreement
were
was
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were
an
compulsory changes that Correct article usage
apply
has
happened even in a month. The Unnecessary verb
apply
number
of persons requested
information through Correct pronoun usage
who requested
letter
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letters
email
has reduced because of Fix the agreement mistake
emails
dominant
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the dominant
call
.
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calls
In contrast
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received during Unnecessary verb
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the
January month was approximately Correct article usage
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same
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the same
in
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communication
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went
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tourist
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the tourist
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