The table below gives information about values (NZ$) of the exports of kiwi fruit from New Zealand to five countries between 2010 and 2012.

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The table illustrates the variations in the values of the imports of

kiwi

fruit from five different countries from 2010 to 2012, in millions of New

Zealand

dollars

Overall

, it is noticeable that

while

the amount of

money

that

Japan

, China, and Russia spent on imported

kiwi

from New

Zealand

soared,

Mexico

and

Saudi

Arabia

witnessed the opposite trend, with

Japan

being the biggest importer. In detail, the amount of

money

that

Japan

spent on imported

kiwi

from New

Zealand

soared from 271 to 325 between 2010 and 2012, followed by China

that

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which

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increased by 20

million

dollars

from 74

million

dollars

Similarly

, the period between 2010 and 2012

also

witnessed an upward trend from 968 thousand

dollars

to over 2

million

dollars

in the figure for Russia.

In addition

while

Japan

, China, and Russia allocated more

money

for imported

kiwi

from New

Zealand

, the opposite was true for

Mexico

and

Saudi

Arabia

. In 2010, the amount of

money

that New

Zealand

received from exported

kiwi

Mexico

and

Saudi

Arabia

was 6

million

dollar

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dollars

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and 290 thousand

dollars

respectively

Rephrase

apply

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then

Rephrase

respectively

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these two figures went through a period of dramatical

decreased

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decrease

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in 2012, which stood at 3,3

million

dollars

for

Mexico

and 82 thousand

dollars

for

Saudi

Arabia

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The table below gives information about values (NZ$) of the exports of kiwi fruit from New Zealand to five countries between 2010 and 2012.

Some school leavers choose to travel or work for a year before going to university. What might be the reasons for this? What are the disadvantages of this practice? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge and experience. Write at least 250 words.

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