The table below gives information about values (NZ$) of the exports of kiwi fruit from New Zealand to five countries between 2010 and 2012.

The table below gives information about values (NZ$) of the exports

of kiwi fruit from New Zealand to five countries between 2010 and

2012.
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The table illustrates the variations in the values of the imports of
kiwi
fruit from five different countries from 2010 to 2012, in millions of New
Zealand
dollars
.
Overall
, it is noticeable that
while
the amount of
money
that
Japan
, China, and Russia spent on imported
kiwi
from New
Zealand
soared,
Mexico
and
Saudi
Arabia
witnessed the opposite trend, with
Japan
being the biggest importer. In detail, the amount of
money
that
Japan
spent on imported
kiwi
from New
Zealand
soared from 271 to 325 between 2010 and 2012, followed by China
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increased by 20
million
dollars
from 74
million
dollars
.
Similarly
, the period between 2010 and 2012
also
witnessed an upward trend from 968 thousand
dollars
to over 2
million
dollars
in the figure for Russia.
In addition
,
while
Japan
, China, and Russia allocated more
money
for imported
kiwi
from New
Zealand
, the opposite was true for
Mexico
and
Saudi
Arabia
. In 2010, the amount of
money
that New
Zealand
received from exported
kiwi
to
Mexico
and
Saudi
Arabia
was 6
million
dollar
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and 290 thousand
dollars
respectively
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,
then
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these two figures went through a period of dramatical
decreased
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in 2012, which stood at 3,3
million
dollars
for
Mexico
and 82 thousand
dollars
for
Saudi
Arabia
.
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