The chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018.

The chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018.
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the bar chart illustrates the percentage of citizen’s income
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spent in 1968 and 2018 in a country.
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, it can be seen that more money was
spend
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on food 35% in 1968,
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the highest share was allocated to leisure activities in 2018 just over 20%. Food was responsible for 35% of disbursing as highest figure in 1968, as opposed to fuel and power
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the lowest cost
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assigned to them
approximately
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5% in
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year. In 2018, the highest amount of money has been expended on leisure pursuits a little more than 20%,
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fuel
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power and personal goods ranked
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about 4%. The disparity between the two figures
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transport and housing was almost the same in both two years,
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the money spent in 2018 was 2 times more than in 1968.
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, household goods contributed about 7% to spending incomes on it in both 1968 and 2018 years.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Weekly income
  • Expenditure
  • Consumption patterns
  • Cost of living
  • Discretionary spending
  • Inflation
  • Economic indicators
  • Demographics
  • Socio-economic factors
  • Technology advancements
  • Government policies
  • Consumerism
  • Lifestyle changes
  • Fiscal habits
  • Budget allocation
  • Financial priorities
  • Societal trends
  • Purchasing power
  • Income distribution
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