The table below shows the world's ten most expensive countries for petrol along with other financial information.
The table provides information about expenditure on
petrol
in different countries
compared to average monthly salary.
Overall
, Erthrea spent the most money on petrol
whereas
Norway's monthly expense was lower than other countries
.
Firstly
, more than three-fifths of the payment from income was used for petrol
in Erthrea although
average
monthly disposable income was lower than Correct article usage
the average
other
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in other
countries
. Turkey was in the second position of expenditure (34.20%) where one-fourth of the spent on petrol
in Greece. However
, Italy and British spent their earnings on petrol
were 15.50 per cent and 10.30 per cent respectively.
Furthermore
, although
Norway spent the highest amount of money on petrol
(319.85 dollars), percentage
of monthly expenditure was lower than in other Correct article usage
the percentage
countries
. In contrast
, Sweden and Belgium spent almost similar amounts of pay that were 275 and 273.05 dollars respectively, but Belgium was 1% per cent higher than Sweden because of their average monthly revenue (3125 and 3554 respectively).Submitted by sadikasharmin888 on
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