It is important for people to take risks, both In their professional lives and their personal lives. Do you think the advantages of taking risks outweigh the disadvantages ?

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no gain, some people get challenges in their normal and professional life. In
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which
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everything
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a
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to us. Everyone can not come out of the uterus. some
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died by the way. After
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birth we have a
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for
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of the every life
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on
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earth is that.
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,
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humans
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try to stand up, walk,think,write,
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. Not only
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but
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had to
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take
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risk for
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their day
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to day
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choes
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after delivery. If we do not try to do anything, We
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go ahead. Indeed, We only think
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present conditions and we
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decisions only for current positions. Sometimes it's not too bad but as a
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we want knowledge,money
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training, etc. For
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example, look at the exams, If we faced
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that we could get good
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results
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and could not do so it gave bad
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results
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. We should get
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of
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the exam
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to
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it great level.
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, We could not pass We have a self impression we faced but we could not
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we
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do any other things.
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, not the exam
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side to our professions. It
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also
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the same. As a doctor, He has a responsibility to cure a bad patient. If he did not take that
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,
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it would be
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harmful to
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the patient
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. In conclusion, Without
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taking
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a risk people cannot improve
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personal life and career
developments
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development
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. great place win in the society who takes challenges and go ahead.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Opportunities
  • Growth
  • Innovation
  • Challenges
  • Self-discovery
  • Resilience
  • Uncertainty
  • Consequences
  • Calculated risks
  • Stagnation
  • Regret
  • Comfort zone
  • Entrepreneurship
  • Adventurous spirit
  • Thriving
  • Failure
  • Mitigate
  • Reap the rewards
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