The graph below shows the hours of teaching per year done by each teacher in four different categories.

The graph below shows the hours of teaching per year done by each teacher in four different categories.
The graph illustrates the amount of teaching that was given per
year
by each teacher ranging in different
grade
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.
Overall
, the USA had the highest
time
spent teaching in three levels of education.
Additionally
, upper secondary students hold the largest amount of
time
that learners
spent
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in
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each
year
. The figure for Japan and Spain had similarities in the number of
time
taught in primary and lower secondary, which accounted for up to 600
hours
spent every
year
in
two
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countries. Followed by
this
figure is that the
time
spent teaching upper secondary in Spain is slightly higher than that of Japan,
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occurring
occuring
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occurring
at almost 1000
hours
each
year
As for the remaining two countries, the
hours
spent in primary school in Ireland is 600
hours
while
the USA had around 830
hours
taught in
comparision
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comparison
.
Similarily
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, the
amount
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of
hours
teaching lower and upper secondary in Ireland is comparatively around 600 to 580
hours
, the number
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to fall short of
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when being compared to the USA, which is around 1140 to 1150
hours
, respectively a
year
.
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