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Children are facing more pressure nowadays from academic, social and commercial perspectives. What are the causes of these pressures and what measures should be taken to reduce these pressures?.

#children #pressure #perspectives #pressures #measures
Nowadays, we can say that
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children
 are facing more
pressure
 from academic, social and commercial perspectives.
This
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due to
 many reasons. So the causes with solutions are explained in the following write-ups. The foremost cause of the issues mentioned above is,
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due to
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the increase in usage of social media platforms,
due to
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children
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pressure
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of
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 follow the
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on-going
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 trend.
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for instance
 when a child or a person
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 other people's
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, maybe of travelling, or some sort of entertainment, the viewers may feel depressed
due to
this
. Another main issue for
children
 nowadays
,
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 is about the academics, which includes the
pressure
 handling
everyday
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, as the institutes put more
pressure
due to
 the
competetion
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competition
. There are many solutions to
this
 problem, one of which is, To reduce the usage of social media, by doing
this
 the child would not feel sad by watching other people
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,
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 child would get more free time,
in
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which he/she could do some productive work for
self improvement
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. Another solution
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this
 problem is that the government should make rules
little
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lineant
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lenient
,
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 so that the
children
would'nt
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wouldn't
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pressure
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 of
studies
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their studies
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.
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, we can say that the number of suicides
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 students is increasing, so the government
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the society should get together and work on
this
 issue, and try not to pressurize the youth and
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not to demotivate them.
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