The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical apliances and amount of time spent doing in households in one country between 1920 and 2019. Summarises the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.

The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical apliances and amount of time spent doing in households in one country between 1920 and 2019. Summarises the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.
The first line graph depicts the percentage of washing machines, refrigerators and vacuum cleaners owned per
households
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between 1920 and 2019. The second
ones
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shows the number of
hours
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doing housework per week over the same years.
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, the number of
eletrical
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electrical
appliances increased over the period considered. At the same time, the number of
hours
of housework per week significantly decreased. 63 At the beginning of the survey, the most popular object was the washing machine (you could find one in 40% of households). Over the years, its use kept increasing until in 2019 it was the least popular
eletrical
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electrical
appliance owned (with a percentage of just over 70%). For both refrigerators and vacuum
cleaner
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cleaners
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, we experienced a substantial increase over the years; in 1920 no one owned a refrigerator and only 30% of households had vacuums. In 2019 the ownership of those two objects rose to 100%. From the second line
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it is evident that an increase
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electrical appliances in every household caused a
decrese
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decrease
in housework
hours
per week, going from 50
hours
in 1920 to just over 10 in 2019.
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