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The chart and table below give information about tourists at a particular holiday resort in australia. Sumerise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparations where relevant

The chart and table below give information about tourists at a particular holiday resort in australia. Sumerise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparations where relevant
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The bar chart and table demonstrate the data about visitors who have a trip to Australia, and
also
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 additional information about their stay.
Overall
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, it could be seen that there are several countries who visited Australia country, and the first place
Asian
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 citizens, the second is individuals from Europe.
According to
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 the chart,
Asian
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 people dominate among other countries with 37 per cent,
while
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 visitors from the US are two times lower. The least number of travellers are from other countries, they constitute merely 10 per cent. Turning to the table, American
tourists
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 have the same activity as individuals from Asia.
However
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 European
tourists
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 are keen on swimming and sunbathing activities and
tourists
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 from other regions are interested in surfing. The most common accommodation for
Asian
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 travellers is a 5-star hotel,
while
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 the folks from America are a 4-star hotel. European
tourists
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 have similar accommodations to
tourists
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 from other regions, it's camping and caravan. The most interesting thing is that
American
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an American
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 tourist's average stay is two times longer than
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Asian
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an Asian
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 tourist's stay (7 days).
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words asian, tourists with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stay" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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