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The chart below shows the number of households in the US by their annual income in 2007, 2011 and 2015.

The chart below shows the number of households in the US by their annual income in 2007, 2011 and 2015.
#households #income
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The provided bar chart compares the United States
households
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’ quantity in five ranges of earnings over a 7-year
period
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.
Overall
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, the
number
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 of
households
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 with lower incomes and the highest
income
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 increased
at the end
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 of the study
period
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,
while
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 the
number
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 of
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medium earned
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households
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 remained unchanged during the studied
period
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. In 2007, 25
million
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 and 27
million
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of
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the
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US
households
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 earned less than $25,000 and $25,000 - $49,000 respectively.
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, 20
million
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 had a
medium
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income
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 from $50,000 to $74,999.
Furthermore
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, more than the
medium
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income
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$
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75,000 - $99,000 was earned by the least
number
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 of
households
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 about 15
million
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,
however
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 the highest
income
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, more than $100,000 was earned by the most
number
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 of
households
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 about 29.5
million
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. Notably, these trends continued to the end of the studied
period
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.
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 2015, the most
number
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 of
households
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 about 34
million
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 had the most earnings.
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, the
households
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, who earned
medium
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 or more than
medium
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 money almost, remained unchanged.
Finally
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,
households
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 with the lowest or more than the lowest
income
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 increased, reaching 26
million
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 and 26.5
million
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 respectively in 2015.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words period, number, households, income, medium, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "unchanged" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Economic landscape
  • Household income
  • Economic health
  • Income brackets
  • Trends
  • Inflation
  • Unemployment rates
  • Job market
  • Income disparity
  • Housing affordability
  • Access to education
  • Quality of life
  • Economic policies
  • Income inequality
  • Mitigating
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