IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 6.5

The chart below shows the number of households in the US by their annual income in 2007, 2011 and 2015.

The chart below shows the number of households in the US by their annual income in 2007, 2011 and 2015.
✨ Do you want to improve your IELTS writing?
The provided bar chart compares the United States
households
Use synonyms
’ quantity in five ranges of earnings over a 7-year
period
Use synonyms
.
Overall
Linking Words
, the
number
Use synonyms
 of
households
Use synonyms
 with lower incomes and the highest
income
Use synonyms
 increased
at the end
Linking Words
 of the study
period
Use synonyms
,
while
Linking Words
 the
number
Use synonyms
 of
Use synonyms
medium earned
Add a hyphen
medium-earned
show examples
households
Use synonyms
 remained unchanged during the studied
period
Use synonyms
. In 2007, 25
million
Use synonyms
 and 27
million
Use synonyms
of
Change preposition
apply
show examples
the
Correct article usage
apply
show examples
US
households
Use synonyms
 earned less than $25,000 and $25,000 - $49,000 respectively.
Also
Linking Words
, 20
million
Use synonyms
 had a
medium
Use synonyms
income
Use synonyms
 from $50,000 to $74,999.
Furthermore
Linking Words
, more than the
medium
Use synonyms
income
Use synonyms
$
Change preposition
of $
show examples
75,000 - $99,000 was earned by the least
number
Use synonyms
 of
households
Use synonyms
 about 15
million
Use synonyms
,
however
Linking Words
 the highest
income
Use synonyms
, more than $100,000 was earned by the most
number
Use synonyms
 of
households
Use synonyms
 about 29.5
million
Use synonyms
. Notably, these trends continued to the end of the studied
period
Use synonyms
.
Repeatedly in
Rephrase
In
show examples
 2015, the most
number
Use synonyms
 of
households
Use synonyms
 about 34
million
Use synonyms
 had the most earnings.
Also
Linking Words
, the
households
Use synonyms
, who earned
medium
Use synonyms
 or more than
medium
Use synonyms
 money almost, remained unchanged.
Finally
Linking Words
,
households
Use synonyms
 with the lowest or more than the lowest
income
Use synonyms
 increased, reaching 26
million
Use synonyms
 and 26.5
million
Use synonyms
 respectively in 2015.

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site's author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
▼
Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words period, number, households, income, medium, million with synonyms.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 5 times.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "unchanged" was used 2 times.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
▼
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Economic landscape
  • Household income
  • Economic health
  • Income brackets
  • Trends
  • Inflation
  • Unemployment rates
  • Job market
  • Income disparity
  • Housing affordability
  • Access to education
  • Quality of life
  • Economic policies
  • Income inequality
  • Mitigating
What to do next:
Look at other essays: