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The diagram shows a process of making a storage area from a material called concrete canvas Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram shows a process of making a storage area from a material called concrete canvas Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
#process #storage #area #canvas #information #features #comparisons
The diagram
illustrate
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illustrates
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 a process of making a storage field from a material as known concrete canvas.
Overall
, it can be seen that
whole
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the whole
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 process is divided
in
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into
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 eight
step
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steps
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following
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followed
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 by manufacturing, delivering, unwrapping, spreading, pumping air inside, watering, setting and storing.
Firstly
, by use of dry concrete manufacturing the fibrous top surface and waterproof layer.
Next,
delivering, unwrapping and
spreding
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spreading
 on the ground around 10 metres with
use
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the use
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 of pegs and rope. After that, in the area of underground pumping air from
opposite
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the opposite
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site
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side
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 of
door
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the door
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.
Then
, up to 8 metres
height
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in height
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spreying
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spraying
 the water around
covering
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the covering
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.
Lastly
, leave the area
20
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for 20
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-24 hours and
finally
,
storing
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the storage
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 place is ready for
put
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putting
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 the stuff inside.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • diagram
  • process
  • storage area
  • material
  • concrete canvas
  • prepare
  • level
  • compact
  • lay
  • wet
  • activate
  • cement
  • hydrate
  • harden
  • form
  • solid structure
  • edges
  • secure
  • infiltration
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