The table shows the percentage of government expenditure on health care in five countries in 2006 as well as the proportions of 24-30-year-olds working in medical services. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

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The table displays information about the proportion of

government

spending used on

health

maintenance and the percentage of

individuals

from 24 to 30 who worked in medical

services

in 2006.

Overall

, the Italian

government

is the one that uses the higher amount of their funds on

health

care

while

Poland was the one with the lowest spenders, but they had

also

among the highest proportion of

individuals

between 24 and 30 who

work

in medical

services

. 27% of

government

expenditure is used for

health

care

in Italy, and 40% of Italian people have a job related to medical

services

, which was the second highest

overall

. The next country that spends the most on

health

care

is Spain, with 13%, and 34% of

individuals

working in the area. Iceland’s

government

used 11% of their funds for

health

care

, and 29% of

individuals

work

in medical-related

work

. Finland is the second country that spends the least on

health

care

with only 9%, and only one-fourth of people from 24 to 30

work

this

area.

Finally

, Poland

Remove the comma

apply

show examples

is the nation that wastes the least in

health

care

, with only 5%, but it has the highest number of people working in medical

services

, with 54%.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words government, health, individuals, services, care, work with synonyms.

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