Computers and museums Have made it impossible for Office workers to do much of their work from home Instead of working in office every day. Work from home should be encouraged as it is good for workers and employees. Do you agree or disagree?

There is no denying the fact that in
this
modern life, people are less
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the rules
to
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work
at offices.
While
it is a commonly held belief that the majority of society
tend
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to
work
from
there
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comfort homes, there is
also
an argument opposing it. 
To begin
with, home
workers
shows
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a significant improvement more than officers. It is
also
possible to say that, homes are less stressful and provide flexibility more than
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companie's
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company's
offices.
therefore
, a lot of
workers
and managers like to
work
from their houses because they feel that
this
save
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their
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time
more
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.
For example
,
this
reduce the waste of time in transportation
,
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and give the freedom for both employees and bosses to schedule their life as they want. Another point to consider,
this
effects
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positively on people who
having
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difficulties
such
as
,
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social and health issues.
In other words
, folks with
this
opportunity
shows
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us a huge difference in the quality
,
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and commitment compared to office
workers
.
Moreover
,
according to
the public health institution encouraging
the
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member of society to
work
from their home, could save their lives three times more than out of their comfortable houses.
In
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instance, during the pandemic Corona, we could not ignore that not just working, but
also
shopping, and studying rely on house sitting. In conclusion, despite people having different views,
however
, on balance, I believe that
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your
workers
the opportunity to
work
from anywhere they want,
this
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will help you to have loyal employees.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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