The charts show the sale of five different kinds of jam from 2009 to 2014.
this
line graph Linking Words
show
the data about ow sale Change the verb form
shows
Use synonyms
Change preposition
of strawbary
strawbary
, Correct your spelling
strawberry
Use synonyms
respberry
, Correct your spelling
raspberry
grape
, Use synonyms
plum
and cherry jams Use synonyms
in
2009 to 2014. It is clear from the graph that almost Change preposition
from
Use synonyms
strawbary
, Correct your spelling
strawberry
Use synonyms
respberry
, Correct your spelling
raspberry
grape
and Use synonyms
Use synonyms
respberry
sale Correct your spelling
raspberry
was
increased except Unnecessary verb
apply
plum
was Use synonyms
decreasd
Correct your spelling
decreased
decrease
in
2009 to 2014.
Change preposition
from
According to
what Linking Words
Add a missing verb
is shwon
shwon
, the Correct your spelling
shown
grape
Use synonyms
ries rapidlly
from 0.5% to 4.5 per cent Correct your spelling
rose rapidly
in
2009 -2014. Change preposition
from
While
Linking Words
,
Remove the comma
apply
plum
was reverse Use synonyms
grape
it decreased Use synonyms
gradully
around 3.8% in 2009 until zero percentage in 2014. Correct your spelling
gradually
Moreover
, charry in Linking Words
first
years Correct article usage
the first
waas
1.9% but it Correct your spelling
was
was go
up to 2.5% after one Wrong verb form
went
years
. Change to a singular noun
year
Then
, Linking Words
fall
to 2 rates in 2014. After Wrong verb form
fell
that
it Add a comma
that,
was
Unnecessary verb
apply
climed
to Correct your spelling
claimed
climbed
2.9
Correct article usage
a 2.9
ratio
in the ed of Change to a plural noun
ratios
pirod
.
Correct your spelling
period
Whereas
, the Linking Words
Use synonyms
strawbary
and Correct your spelling
strawberry
Use synonyms
respberry
were increased Correct your spelling
raspberry
sightly
in 2009 to 2012. Correct your spelling
slightly
Then
, the Linking Words
Use synonyms
strawbary
jam Correct your spelling
strawberry
jump
from 4 Wrong verb form
jumped
percentage
to 7 per cent. Replace the word
per cent
However
, Linking Words
Use synonyms
respberry
was almost remain constant in 2012 to 2014.
Correct your spelling
raspberry
To sum up
, we could say that the Linking Words
Use synonyms
strawbary
Correct your spelling
strawberry
has
Wrong verb form
had
highest
Correct article usage
the highest
sale
from 2009 to 2012 , and Fix the agreement mistake
sales
Use synonyms
plum
Correct article usage
the plum
has
Wrong verb form
had
lowest
.Correct article usage
the lowest
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words strawbary, respberry, grape, plum with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "show" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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