Some children can learn more efficiently by watching TV. Therefore, children should watch TV regularly both in school and at home? Do you agree or disagree?

#children #tv #school #home

It is admittedly true that

children

can easily learn from others

whereas

it is not mandatory what object they are learning from

such

, people , environment, family friends so on. some

kids

are learn

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are learning

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from watching

which good way to learn but schools should not use

teaching

Wrong verb form

teach

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kids

. In my opinion, I completely disagree with watching

in school. In

this

essay, I will discuss how efficiently teach a child. On the one side,

children

can easily adapt any things in a short time which is good for parents sometimes.

Children

's brains are too powerful for learning

whereas

they learn visually effectively which is inconvenient because they are not only learning all the time but

also

they

are watch

Change the verb form

are watching

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cartton

Correct your spelling

cartoon

cartoons

. In

this

modern time, cartoon companies make animation for

kids

while

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apply

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they put some chocolate ads and

also

kids

' product ads which attract

kids

easily.

As a result

children

want that product which is not convenient for

kids

and their parents. Another example

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apply

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is if a kid watches

a lot

then

there is a high chance of having an eye problem in future. on the other side, there are several ways to teach

kids

in school and at home

instead

of on

. It is indeed true that they can learn too fast by watching

instead

of reading. So, a teacher can teach practically.

For example

, the teacher show them practically how to hand wash which is kind of watching but it is more convenient compared to

or reading book.

To sum up

, watching

to learn is

inconveniant

Correct your spelling

inconvenient

for a kid's health and their long life where practically learning is a good way to learn for

kids

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